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| "Flying Without Wings" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] | Reviewed By: kuramaandkarasu [MediaMiner Member] On: December 03, 2005 18:18 CST
Comment/Review:
Thanks for submitting your fanfiction to FFRG! I found minor grammar and spelling errors through the story, and I continually saw the words 'your' and 'you're' being switched in meaning. The plot flowed smoothly, and the imagery was great. The flashbacks weren't awkward and fit into the story really well, not disrupting the flow of it and helped to give more background on the characters. It kept me interested and the sexual scenes didn't seem to just be sex for sex's sake; instead, it added to the plot and story. All in all, it was a really good story. Keep writing!
| Reviewed By: Youkai_Obsessed [MediaMiner Member] On: August 02, 2005 15:21 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wows!! What an intense story. I felt so bad for Fai. I was so happy that he has Kurogane as his lover now. I loved the flashback scenes; they fit so well into this. This really flowed so beautifully. I was mesmerized by it. The sex was hot. The emotions were so well written out and heart wrenching at times. The angst by the tree was so sad, yet it fit perfectly into this. The ending was perfect, it pulled the whole story together. I was so glad he went back with Kurogane! Wonderful job on this! You have breathtaking talent!! *Huggles*
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