| "Chaos Interface" Reviews/Comments [ 10 ] |
Title: no more? :-(
Reviewed By: katsuhito [MediaMiner Member] On: November 24, 2011 10:58 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really enjoyed this fic. The writing and mechanics were a little choppy at times, but the dialogue, characterization, and story elements were enjoyable. For example, Nabiki's comment about increasing the insurance of all her properties at the end of ch2 was funny, and Ranma's reactions after waking up were quite believable, especially since the last thing he knew, he was in a fight for his life, and then wake up in an unknown situation. I'm just sad that there's so little to the story. I hope you write more of this, although after five years, I won't hold my breath. |
Reviewed By: GrayPheonix [MediaMiner Member] On: December 03, 2007 08:42 EST
Comment/Review:
How, interesting. The writing style needs work (you jump around for unimportant details, omitting them instead of directing attention to the differences in teh mundane). On the other hand, such a style makes writing such scenes far easier. Still, please continue to update this fic (though it's been years since this one has been updated). So, update soon, ja ne.
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Title: Chaos Interface
Reviewed By: Jedi [MediaMiner Member] On: December 20, 2006 00:08 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great job so far on the story, Please do your best to add more chapters soon.
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Reviewed By: Mystic-Ssj5Goku [MediaMiner Member] On: February 14, 2006 06:12 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 3 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 4 of 10
Overall Rating: 2 of 10 Comment/Review:
How can I put this lightly? You have no ability to use math. You can't stay on Character with a Map. Your Chapters are absolutely tiny and ill constructed. You really need to learn basic math and review your knowledge of the sources your using before trying to make a fan fiction unless you want it to be a horrible attempt at writing.
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Reviewed By: goku_90504 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 26, 2006 19:54 EST
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ranma does not cause that much property damage its the people who fight ranma usually who all should be gone or grown up now by the way what did happen to the others ukyo shampoo and the like
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Reviewed By: Lady Morrigan On: September 12, 2005 02:31 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
About time, Motoko was such a smart ass in the first movie, that i enjoy reading about her getting a good butt-kicking, hahaha.
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Reviewed By: Bluntman On: September 08, 2005 22:52 EDT
Comment/Review:
Very original, I have never seen this kind of crossover. Just one thing though, wouldn't the Tendo sister's be in their mid 50's and ranma still a teenager? Oh well, can't wait to read your next chapter.
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Reviewed By: Light02 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 23, 2005 14:54 EDT
Comment/Review:
Not bad....I tend to view Ranma a bit more restrained than how your writing him. he wouldn't attack blindly.
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Reviewed By: RubberNeck On: August 11, 2005 07:51 EDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh poo. I wanted to read more and find out what happens next. Hope to read more^^
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Reviewed By: shakeval [MediaMiner Member] On: August 06, 2005 04:55 EDT
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this is a good idea, the strength and power of nerima's finest inhumanly strong martial artist verse the futures robotic shortcuts. can't wait for the shock that ranma's abilities give people especially considering the fact that ranma can do things as good or better than makoto, can anyone say umi-sen-ken, yami-sen-ken, moko takabishi and chestnut fist among other things. keep writing this could be a great story, looking forward to the next chapter.
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