| "Unable to Kill" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] |
Reviewed By: Angel_of_innocence [MediaMiner Member] On: August 14, 2005 20:27 CDT
Comment/Review:
I like it so far. Please update soon. have a slight suggestion as well. Try to make the chapters a little bit longer and more detailed. It is slightly confusing as to what is going on exactly. But none-the-less this is and interesting fic and I look forward to seeing an update soon.
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Reviewed By: Bombayoni [MediaMiner Member] On: August 05, 2005 14:58 CDT
Comment/Review:
i'm impressed, my padawan.... is there going to be more?
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Reviewed By: Bombayoni [MediaMiner Member] On: August 04, 2005 21:56 CDT
Comment/Review:
First of all, for paragraphs... i'll email you that one kay?
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Reviewed By: Bombayoni [MediaMiner Member] On: August 03, 2005 21:05 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 3 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
You need to seperate your paragraphs (or have them in the first place) i'm not trying to be mean, but your formatting sucks. I liked it, but you never really explained why Heero didn't kill him... Just a suggestion.
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