| "The second Pretear" Reviews/Comments [ 11 ] |
Title: Mmmmmm....i don't have a title...
Reviewed By: kuronue's MINE!!! On: March 22, 2006 17:13 CST
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I could not understand this chapter...at all! But do not take offense tooooo this review. It is not a flame at all. All the chapters before this were good. Just step up your game a little bit, that's all i'm sayin' P.S. I looooooooooooooovvvvvvvvvvvvve your other stories.
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Title: Great...I guess
Reviewed By: Latina will lose if she choose to refuse to put Yomi first. And she know he always comes first. On: December 17, 2005 22:06 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
If it was me, I wouldn't have been like 'It was great seeing you again fluffy-sama' I'd been like 'Well ain't that a... You know you should really know who you're killing dummy! That's why I'm going to come back and haunt your ass! Ha, how ya like them apples?!' Then I would have start coughing up blood then died. How much you wanna bet he'll revive me quicker than you can said lemon pepper? I'd bet you ten dollars and I would win. Nobody would want me haunting them...trust me.
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Title: I got one word for you Latina:
Reviewed By: I'mthebossofyou!!! On: October 03, 2005 11:56 CDT
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DUMPASS!!!!!!!!!!!!!1
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Title: PUH-LEEZE!!!!
Reviewed By: Not important to you! On: September 20, 2005 19:36 CDT
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I would have been out!As soon as that bitch fell asleep, I would have silently crept of of the bed.Then I would have found something anything sharp or had a blade, then I would have found some extra clothes, put them on and take out the blade.Then I would have slit his neck so hard.....You could see the inside of his fucking throat.Of I would have chopped his head off, simple as that, and bye-bye Naraku.But this is your story so.....I'll just leave the comments.
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Title: I likey
Reviewed By: Meru Keshoki [MediaMiner Member] On: September 19, 2005 22:02 CDT
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I like it! ^^
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Title: Why are you picking on go
Reviewed By: shewhogotkickedoffbecauseofsomethingstupid!~_~ On: September 18, 2005 21:44 CDT
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WHY ARE YOU PICKING ON GO!!!!!WHAT DID HE EVER DO TO YOU?????!!!!!!I DON'T CARE WHAT YOU SAY, HE IS CUTE, well Hayate's cuter BUT STILL.YOU DON'T HAVE TO PICK ON HIM,AND PUNCH HIM IN THE JAW MAKING HIM FLY BACK.And can you say hentai, cuz I sure can.
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Title: Evilness Naraku
Reviewed By: Meru Keshoki [MediaMiner Member] On: September 11, 2005 18:58 CDT
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Since Naraku is so evil, he may be that he could/would: 1.Rape her 2.Kill her 3.Make her his slave (not going to state which kind) 4.Prison her in a box behind a dumpster (which would be horrible for poeple who hate to be next to/behind a dumpster in a box). Good luck picking one or make one up.
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Title: What is N going to do
Reviewed By: Foxygirl12 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 03, 2005 21:28 CDT
Comment/Review:
What is Naraku going to do to her
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Title: I like
Reviewed By: Meru Keshoki [MediaMiner Member] On: August 28, 2005 21:44 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like the story, just alot of typos, as you forgot the ending marks. But other then that, I liked it.
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Title: great
Reviewed By: Kuramasgirl132434 On: August 26, 2005 02:20 CDT
Comment/Review:
Please update why did you leave a cliffy
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Title: Grrrrr
Reviewed By: Foxygirl12 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 26, 2005 02:15 CDT
Comment/Review:
Why did you leave a cliffy update update
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