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Reviewed By: Corwalch On: November 28, 2006 20:27 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
:P cna't help rereading the chapters again@ are u gonna update the fic or abandon it??
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Reviewed By: MangaChild420 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 25, 2006 23:02 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
oh yea im back!! I hope im the third review because i would really like to read more!!! too good to not be read!!! MangaChild420
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Reviewed By: chantygal [MediaMiner Member] On: November 28, 2005 17:58 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
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well I for one am definetly glad some of the theme "old habits are hard to break" coming back in to play with heero. He jus didn't seem fulfilling to me without it........two thumbs up for that. Can't wait to see how he makes Zechs pay .....(evil chuckle) :P...enough bedroom action for now build up the story I can see it only getting better from here on. Keep writing.
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Reviewed By: JHD On: November 25, 2005 00:16 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
man that was so good, i can not wait for you to update.
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Reviewed By: nishi imaidegawa On: November 24, 2005 17:37 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i am really liking this so far, you have a fantastic writing style. keep it up, and i hope to read more
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Reviewed By: Darkanger [MediaMiner Member] On: November 22, 2005 12:57 CST
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Chapter 6 is hilarious. Just the mental image of 01 hiding under a bed alone gave me the giggles. The conversation with Noin on the phone was great too. I really enjoyed this chapter. Keep up the good work. Oh by the way, the book "Making out in Japanese" tha Omni-sama mentioned is a great reference tool for this type story or just a great reference all around. Its fun to spurt out lewd comments when around a group of people who don't speak that language.
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Reviewed By: Nita-sama [MediaMiner Member] On: October 25, 2005 16:34 CDT
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O,o Three huh? does it count if i review two more times? ::grins innocently:: i love it!! so heero's doing this for duo huh? that makes me feel sorry for zech but i do love 1x2 fics. i'm torn but still willing to read more. update soon!!
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Reviewed By: Omni-sama [MediaMiner Member] On: October 25, 2005 14:50 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
OnEgai...not ni. A suggestion for if you are going to continue having Heero shout out random Japanese during sex: pick up the book Making Out in Japanese. It's got a little section of phrases to use during sex. Might find it useful. It would also help reduce the chance of getting things wrong. Although Heero's made out to be a bit too young and naive in this, I'm actually finding the story rather interesting. I think it's because you write the "important" scenes so well. ;) So...if Heero's doing this because he wants to "learn" for Duo... Does that mean there will eventually be 2x1? *puppy eyes*
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Reviewed By: Futile Faith On: October 25, 2005 14:05 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love this story and that was a totally hot lemon. Update soon
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Reviewed By: chantygal [MediaMiner Member] On: October 25, 2005 13:23 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
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Based on new chap: hey what happened man? the story was going so good and then this happened.Unless your planning to end this fic quick. slow the role. I mean one minute you have heero on his usual stubborn streak then all of a sudden he's just submitting to to zechs? then there was not enough juice or much of a storyline between the first time they had sex to the second time. And i mean what happened to all of heero's soldier instincts don't they ever come into play? And where is the even tiniest bit of sophistication in Zechs he seems just too plain a character if you know what I mean.And also so far they've been inside the house mayb you should take some of the training outdoors. But most importantly be more descriptive i don't think the lemon this time was as hot as before because of that factor and the lack of clever dialogue before at dinner. But hey apart from that keep going i definetly still want so see how your play this story out. :)
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Reviewed By: MangaChild420 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 11, 2005 20:38 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
LOVE IT TOO MUCH TO STOP READING!! CAN'T WAIT TO READ MORE. I THINK THAT YOUR STORY IS PERFECT THE WAY IT IS. IT HAS GREAT DETAIL AND HAS A VERY INTERESTING PLOT. PLEASE WRITE MORE!! ^-^MANGACHILD420^-^
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Reviewed By: chantygyal On: September 17, 2005 19:36 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
the plot so far has been expected.a little more resistance on the part of heero would have been more acceptable to his character because wufei is the one more honour bound. Secondly the lemon was hottttttttttt! Very good stuff. Your desription of settings and activities made the reader almost a participant of it in the sense that one was following both characters like that of a reality tv show, getting everything. it's absolutely pleasant so far.can't wait to c what more will b added......if there will b any delightful twists and turns or just ur ability to continure such a good story.
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Title: Silverfanasy
Reviewed By: silverfanasy [MediaMiner Member] On: August 21, 2005 00:00 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Theres only chaps right now,this isn't truely complete yet is it?, i want more and lemon to,so please continue this or right a sequal or whatever.
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Reviewed By: Nita-sama [MediaMiner Member] On: August 19, 2005 20:52 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
do we get a lemon? do we?!
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Reviewed By: turtle_fire On: August 19, 2005 18:09 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
Things are heating up! I can't wait to see the next part! Please include as much 1x6 action as possible!!!
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