| "Emergence" Reviews/Comments [ 169 ] |
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Title: simply beautiful
Reviewed By: tiggrchic82 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 12, 2005 18:08 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
very original, great characterization, keep it up I can't wait for the next chapter
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Reviewed By: Kajunmom76 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 12, 2005 12:14 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great chapter!! Can't wait until the next one!!
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Reviewed By: Ladyblade (nsi) On: September 12, 2005 07:06 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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Not signed in - sorry Well you asked for a review and so I shall deliver ^_^ This chapter, as well as previous ones, is beautifully written. The story line keeps a good pace and gives information/details when needed without overdoing it. I like how you prtrayed Kagome coming out of the coma. Too many times have I seen people writing it as if as was never hurt and everything was great when she woke up. You, however, kept it very realistic. Keep up the good work, I'll be watching you ^_-
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Title: beutiful
Reviewed By: vbollman [MediaMiner Member] On: September 12, 2005 05:28 PDT
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I can't belive it...I almost cried on this one. you put Kagome's feelings as she woke up just right. i'm just hoping that your next chapter does not take as long to get up. i was almost afraid that you had for got about it. Keep up the great work
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Reviewed By: vbollman/Dragonlass On: September 08, 2005 21:29 PDT
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I belive that you are doing a terrific job so far. i'm just hoping that you'll update soon. thanks for an enjoyable read.
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Reviewed By: Radish [MediaMiner Member] On: September 07, 2005 23:59 PDT
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Excellent so far, though I've something of a pet peeve for "Inuyasha thwarting muggers/freaking-rapists only to LET THEM GO afterward" scenarios. He could at least knock them unconscious or something so we can assume authorities come by to pick them up later. *sigh* Oh well.
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Title: lovely story
Reviewed By: fanking On: September 05, 2005 22:36 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
my hearty congrats to u! i must complement u on ur story. it really captures the essence & depth of inu's relationship with kags. very touching up till now. hope u dont dissapoint me with later chapters. i am a sucker for happy endings! dont make us 'eager fans' wait to long ok! ciao!
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Reviewed By: thoughts On: September 01, 2005 07:38 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
A lovely subtle delicate fanfiction. I am looking forward to the rest of this story. You are showing the emotions without the need for a huge conflict. Well written and engrossing. Thanks
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Reviewed By: Stephmtoe [MediaMiner Member] On: August 31, 2005 22:38 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great chapter, I like how you made Kaogmes mother have the oppertunity to bond with Inuyasha. I have not seen that before. Any way keep up the good work and cant wait to see the next posting!
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Reviewed By: Kajunmom76 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 29, 2005 21:15 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I am really enjoying your story!!
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Title: Good start
Reviewed By: Amie On: August 28, 2005 18:18 PDT
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I'm enjoying some of the interesting touches here: InuYasha being calmed by Kagome's scent is a good character note - especially mentioning the "best night of sleep he'd ever had." I like it when authors have little references to the anime or manga in their chapters, but it does bring the canon universe into the ficverse. That being so, I have to wonder why InuYasha doesn't just go and visit Kags in the hospital. He seems to be able to sniff out Kagome and navigate the city without too much trouble. Some of the other reviews have mentioned a choppy flow to the story so far, but this is more than outweighed by your inventive writing and feel for the characters.
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Reviewed By: moongal850 On: August 28, 2005 00:48 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
You have a few things that could be touched up to make the flow a bit smoother. But not too much. Im on the computer a ton and I wouldnt ever mind being a beta reader for you. I can smooth things out for you so you can spend more of your time writing and a little less on the editing. That is what beta slaves are for. ^.^ Im all available if you need one. I would be honored. moongal850@yahoo.com
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Reviewed By: Stephmtoe [MediaMiner Member] On: August 21, 2005 23:07 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was awsome. Cant wait to read the next chapter. If it is anything like your last story Making Things Right, I am in for a realy treat. Keep it up cant wait to read more
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Reviewed By: leila-chan (NSI) On: August 19, 2005 14:26 PDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow, that was pretty intense. i loved it. i guess it takes something like that to get inu's head straight, huh. poor kagome. such bad luck. but maybe it will turn out o.k tho. i don't know where the story is going exactly, but i know it's gonna kick @$$, so i can't wait for more chaps. please update when you can. about beta-ing, i wouldn't mind, but i'm not too reliable. i go out of town alot and i have a daughter in preschool. my time is not my own!...except when i'm readng fanfiction. (mommy time) heh ^__*
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Reviewed By: razorbladesinner [MediaMiner Member] On: August 19, 2005 09:42 PDT
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Oh my GOD! That was so sad!!! :( This is shaping up to be an amazing story! I read through it carefully and I only saw one or two mistakes, but nothing too major. If you need a beta feel free to email me and I'll beta for you. I can't wait to read more of this story.
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