| "A Fox Never Tells" Reviews/Comments [ 18 ] |
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Title: chap 4
Reviewed By: Kazeli [MediaMiner Member] On: March 19, 2009 17:35 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
ok im am enjoying this story alot more. h/e the characters are a bit o/c no real sugestions for that it is your story and it is a fanfic. other then that note alot better then how it started great job!
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Title: lemon reveiw
Reviewed By: Kazeli [MediaMiner Member] On: March 19, 2009 02:11 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
ok one do you relize that men and wemon dont have the same parts? boobies aside>< 1 they have one hole not 2 and their -erm how to word this and not be border on being warned.-.. stick.
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Reviewed By: Kazeli [MediaMiner Member] On: March 19, 2009 01:49 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Grammer and speling is much much better in this chapter. i enjoyed the way you portrayed Kurama and Shuichi. Defintly difernt and defintly liked it great job in this chap the spelling error beig MIA(missing in action) made a big dif in the reading experience
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Reviewed By: Kazeli [MediaMiner Member] On: March 19, 2009 01:30 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 2 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
i am enjoying this to some extent but your grammer errors and mispelling a ton of stuff is horid. i think the story would be greatly improved if you would revise this and fix the spelling erros
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Title: Chap 1
Reviewed By: Kazeli [MediaMiner Member] On: March 19, 2009 01:06 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 2 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 3 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 3 of 10
Overall Rating: 4 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ok sory for the flame but i'll try to be constructive about it. Your grammar is horrid her is a example. "Hey you delinquents get back here!" the storeowner yelled. Slowing down, winded. "Hey you delinquents get back here!" the storeowner yelled, starting to slow down, winded. another example>> > "Hey I'll see you later Kuwabara." Yuusuke said as he walked towards a park instead of towards his home. "Hey I'll see you later Kuwabara." Yusuke said, as he walked towards a park instead of his home. It would be also better red if ther was some kind of dialog in his mind of what he was thinking or a hint of it or just removing hte indication that he was going to a park. and instad write in about his walk to the park and him ariving. I will be the first to admit i am not the best typer or speller, but the best part of reading a story is when the reader can feel like they are in the characters shoes or even just standing on the sidline watching it transpire. Your point of veiw changes are not well thought out and very disruptive to the story in its own way(this is not me saying tha changing POV is bad). POV' charaters name insert' is a good way to make this transition and for those who do not know what POV is make it know at the start of the chapter. Belive it or not people do read that stuff. Spacing between the paragraghs/lines is very important. There was very little of this in your story it made it seem like you were atacked by rabid plot bunnies. Lake of any realy kind of format made is seem eratic and that you typed it as it came out of your head. I sugest writing down your story or typing it first. Read, edit read, edit till the story is as you think it should be. For me this story was not easy to read with the lack of formating. i will read on through the chapters and post more reviews
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Reviewed By: inuyasha0102 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 17, 2006 10:14 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I loved it will you write more stories like this one?
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Title: A Fox Never Tells
Reviewed By: Megan Consoer [MediaMiner Member] On: February 11, 2006 14:04 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?
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Title: A Fox Never Tells
Reviewed By: Megan Consoer [MediaMiner Member] On: January 08, 2006 19:31 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really like this story alot. Can you write some more chapters?
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Reviewed By: kahuffstix [MediaMiner Member] On: November 25, 2005 19:46 CST
Comment/Review:
i loved this story. it was so great. please add more to this story soon.
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Title: A Fox Never Tells
Reviewed By: Megan Consoer [MediaMiner Member] On: September 28, 2005 16:17 CDT
Comment/Review:
I really like this story alot. Can you write some more chapters?
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Title: A Fox Never Tells
Reviewed By: Megan Consoer [MediaMiner Member] On: September 13, 2005 23:35 CDT
Comment/Review:
I really like this story alot. Can you write some more chapters?
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Reviewed By: xWolfsFangx [MediaMiner Member] On: September 06, 2005 11:51 CDT
Comment/Review:
yay! another chapter! please update soon!
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Title: A Fox Never Tells
Reviewed By: Megan Consoer [MediaMiner Member] On: September 02, 2005 16:27 CDT
Comment/Review:
I really like this story alot. Can you write some more chapters?
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Title: I LOVE YOU!!!!!
Reviewed By: KawaiiKoneko89 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 26, 2005 12:15 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I LOVE THIS FIC!!!! Please update soon!!!! I really enjoyed the Lemon. I hope there is going to be somemore lemony goodness to come!!! I am going to put your fic under my fave fics so when you update I will know!!!! Oh and don't you dear listen to that bastard who reviewed saying 'you suck' he is too scared to give his/her own name!!! Freakin' retard!!!! Just please promise you are doing to update PLEASE!!! Hey you can use the flame to finally make kikyo stay dead!!!! I really hate kikyo so I choose not to give her capital. I usually like Kurama/Kagome but I enjoy yaoi so I really like this fic I also enjoy Kagome/Sesshoumaru just because I like seeing fluffy go soft when Kagome is involved. I really hate Sess/Rin cause she is like his freakin' daughter for crying out freakin' loud!!!! I LOVE saying freakin' so don't mind me I am just a poor young 16 year old Yaoi and Lemon lover I really see nothing wrong with it so (sticks tounge out to anyone who thinks lemons are gross and inappropiate(sp?))I g2g2 my mothers house so Ja ne Rissa-sama I hope that you update soon!!! :3
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Reviewed By: xWolfsFangx [MediaMiner Member] On: August 23, 2005 12:55 CDT
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This is a really good story. Update soon!
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