Reviewed By: Lareina On: September 10, 2005 18:49 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was really good, and very moving. The way you portrayed Wolfram's thoughts and feelings was superb. One thing, though, is that sometimes your sentences tend to run on. Example: "I hate you I really do but for as much as I hate you I love you by far more." That needs to be broken up. There were a couple ones like that, and they need to be separated by periods or commas. Aside from that, everything was fine. I really enjoyed it.
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