| "Delicious Punishment" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] |
Reviewed By: Ashcat [MediaMiner Member] On: September 15, 2005 19:38 CDT
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Wow.. I *LOVE* this story.. your a very descriptive and imaginative writer! I especially loved the sadistic description of Seime's punishment for Soubi.. so IC! One tiny critique, I think it would have been a stronger story if Soubi had at least thought out why he fought without Ritsuka. I had originally wanted the gentle ending but with both up there.. I think I like the ass spanked better.. it really made Ritsuka take control of the situation and *BE* the master! I loved the gentle lovemaking at the end to show that all was forgiven.. so beautiful! Please write more stories like this.. your just fabulous! AS for additional direction.. perhaps Soubi gets framed by Seime as being disobedient b/c Seime is jealous of Ritsuka's relationship with him and then he's unjustly punished as he begs and crys to Ritsuka? Alternativly, What if Soubi disobeyes again and is so disturbed by disobeying that he tells on himself and begs forgiveness? What if Soubi still fights without Ritsuka and has to answer to him as why and then gets punished harshly? Argh I have a one track mind! Thanks so much for posting stories!
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Reviewed By: oreade [MediaMiner Member] On: September 13, 2005 16:08 CDT
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Thanks for updating :) You're really good at writing BDSM. Couldn't get your fic out of my head for two days, so now I'm back to leave a little review as a thanks. ;) You described it in so much detail it was easy to feel with them. Loved Ritsuka finally taking initiative and punishing Soubi - though it was so adorable to see him hold back, too! Oh and Soubi giving in. Nice twist to have Semei "help" Ritsuka ;) Thanks again!
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Reviewed By: Ashcat [MediaMiner Member] On: September 12, 2005 21:03 CDT
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Wow.. this is a really well written story. I flinched at the descriptiveness of it. i think you should have Ritska be gentle! He isn't Semei and he should do what his heart tells him! Please update soon!
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