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| "Missing Dog, Found" Reviews/Comments [ 1 ] | Title: ...Kay
Reviewed By: Midnyte Wolf (-too lazy to sign in) On: September 20, 2005 07:59 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
I have to admit that this was a kind of strange AU. You could have added more to the imagery of the fic but over all I could kinda squint at the simple scenes. But don't get me wrong, I stuck with this because I was recently introduced to the coupling of Kakashi and Iruka. I've fallen in love with these two and was more than willing to read ANYTHING with them as the stars. I didn't think I would find another and I was way ready to scan an AU, even if it wasn't really my cup of tea. Things kinda flowed a little too fast, Pakkun was kinda too... insistant, and they felt a mutual attraction WAY too easily. But that's just one obessed girl's opinion. Maybe you should try more of a descriptive writing style with kind of a touchy, feely nature? I don't know, but your thoughts and feelings you're trying to hit at need to be portrayed more fully, to the tip top extent. And things could bare to slow. All in all it was very okay.
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