| "Desecration of Innocence" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] |
Title: Finished
Reviewed By: little_white_kitsune [MediaMiner Member] On: July 30, 2009 13:48 CDT
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B'awwwww, and now you stop? D= You shouldn't, as you write amazing rape/horror scenarios. (not that I like rape or anything. XD) I have a strong stomache for these kinds of things and you even managed to disturb me, so it'd be a shame to let this story go to waste. I'd really like to see it finished.
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Title: First chapter
Reviewed By: little_white_kitsune [MediaMiner Member] On: July 30, 2009 09:54 CDT
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Hmmm... well the concept is good, but there are a few things that bother me. First of all is Kagome's reaction to Shippo's death. She's a sensitive person who expresses and feels things very openly, so it's true she would break down like that. However, we've seen multiple times that there is an instinctive fire inside her in situations like that. That fire would have had Naraku's head blown to kingdom come in a matter of seconds, she's done it before. Second is: why would Inuyasha not be there within a minute of smelling Shippo's blood? Even if he didn't smell Naraku, which has never happened before when he's outside his castle, I really can't believe he would go THAT far away when hunting. He would be there in a flash. I dunno. I'll keep reading since I like the concept, and if I really enjoy myself, I'll leave a more positive review. =) I too, hate being the bitch.
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Reviewed By: Rainstorm61879 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 28, 2009 04:51 CDT
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truly disturbing. you have a wicked talent in this fic. I am rather repulsed yet undeniably drawn. Kinda like a train wreck you know it's wrong but you can't look away. I also do not mean that as any offense. Your style is very fluid and you must proofread a lot as I didn't seen any mistakes, or if there were they weren't enough to detract from the story. I'll be watching for updates
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Title: Awsome!
Reviewed By: BlackDiamon [MediaMiner Member] On: November 21, 2005 16:20 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
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Oh me, oh my! what will happen to Kagome?? Please do update. Your story has definitely caught my interest. And how about the rest of the cast? do we get in insight on what they are going through? What happened when they found poor little shippo's severed head? What will the real Inuyasha do? So many questions left unanswered. please follow-up on your story. Thanks! ^_^
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Title: O_O
Reviewed By: AW555 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 28, 2005 22:30 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OMG, this fic totally...ROCKS MY SOCKS Update SOON!
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