| "The Angel Alchemist" Reviews/Comments [ 7 ] |
Reviewed By: flame giver [MediaMiner Member] On: January 02, 2008 10:02 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 4 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 4 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
ok, your story so far is ok but your chapters are more like paragraphs and they are in a weird format. every word begins with CAP and there is barly any punchuation (!.?) also there is very little detail in you're story as well. you say edward is mad...ok how about you tell me what he looks like when he is mad. does his face darken? does it burn red? does he yell at the top of his lungs and trys to attack and al has to hold him back? you need to be more descriptive with your writting and make it longer. a chapter should be over 1000 words or close to it. your story is good so i wont stop reading it but you need to rewrite the story to make it better. there is always room and ways to improve. please do not take what i said to hard or to lightly i'm just giving you some advice.
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Reviewed By: EdLuver [MediaMiner Member] On: March 18, 2006 20:04 CST
Comment/Review:
hey holly wats up just wanted to say hi i liked the first chapter so far well g2g bye ~kaitlyn~
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Title: So COOL!
Reviewed By: Soulless Wanderer [MediaMiner Member] On: October 23, 2005 19:14 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is by far one of my most favorite stories. Keep up the excellent work.
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Reviewed By: Shanu On: September 22, 2005 17:32 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 6 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love your fanfic! It's so funny and creative! I'm writing a fanfic myself, it's got inspriation in it by you so please read it. Small iddy biddy advice. Periods and Grammar help. I don't mean to sound mean, but I had a hard time reading some things you wrote. M'Kay?
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Title: You Rock!
Reviewed By: Aurora DeNeil [MediaMiner Member] On: September 15, 2005 13:00 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Tens across the board! Your fic is awesome! I can't wait for the next chapter!
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Title: Kougakola
Reviewed By: Kougakola [MediaMiner Member] On: September 05, 2005 21:58 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
really good.please update i beg you.
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Title: good
Reviewed By: Big Sis On: August 28, 2005 19:44 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
It's real good. Keep up the work and update often. I can't wait to see what happens next. Make your chapters longer, though, it makes it more interresting.
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