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| "Descent" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] | Title: Feedback for: Descent
Reviewed By: Mainframe On: May 07, 2006 07:37 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow. I mean WOW! This is brilliant. I've only been interested in Naruto for a few weeks and this was one of the first fic's I read in the fandom. I have to say, not having seen the anime yet; this is not a pairing that sprang out at me. Gai was kinda….Gai. If that makes sense ^^; But it works. This definitely works. I loved the way they both slipped into different facets of their personalities. Kakashi's I didn't think was so much of a change. To begin with. But Gai not talking at all and being so thoroughly focused and brutal was just plain scary, I actually got a cold shiver as I read it. What a transformation. Very cool! Out of interest: how did you come up with that approach to him? I love it and it works, but I'm curious. Kakashi. Well, he's always been a hard on to pin down (have downloaded Manga's to chap 305) seen as he keeps himself so well hidden most of the time and I didn't think in your fic he's changed so much…until after the job was done. Enter his long lost twin brother: the total adrenaline junkie (now I get why Gai insists on going with him). I loved that whole scene. It was very powerful; Kakashi letting loose and Gai bringing him back and fearing that the next time he might not be able to. Having known him so long he must have seen this behaviour grow. And then the ending with Lee was so sweeet! (3 Loved the whole thing. You always seem to get the characters and what motivates them spot on and the stories are always interesting and leave me chomping at the bit for the next chapter. (The Arrangement, Trial & Error, The Whispers & Freeport are some of my fav's) Curios. Do you work on the characters and their relation to each other. Where it starts and then where you want it to end. Or do you focus on the storyline first? Or is it not conscious at all and you just start with an idea or scene in yer head and start writing to see where it goes? Feel free to ignore the interrogation at the bottom here. I like to write myself but suck at it, I tend to get the storyline ok. but the characters end up OOC. Pickin yer brains really. Anyhow. Bottom line: Thanks for once again writing are really great fic! I enjoyed it thoroughly and the pace was excellent. Now I've just spotted another fic you've written with the same pairing so I'm off. ^_^ Jen (Mainframe)
| Reviewed By: Loved the story On: November 19, 2005 21:03 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey that was good I usually just skipped over Gai/Kakashi pairings but this time I didn't and I'm glad....loved it!!!!
| Reviewed By: flay On: September 29, 2005 21:09 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
aaaagh! write them all! i'd like to read your sasunaru when it comes out. i loved your naruto in big heart, drunken fist. very funny. yosh, this was a cool fic. i still absolutely love your fight scene. too cool. please write! you're cranking out beauties!
| Reviewed By: amiko 16 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 21, 2005 03:39 CDT
Comment/Review:
wahaha Nice descriptions XD Tho I admit, I hesitated before reading it when I saw that it was KakaGai o_o; Talk about unusual pairings. Next fic? I command you to do a SasuNaru!! *points imperiously*
| Title: Hoot!
Reviewed By: Sahara Storm [MediaMiner Member] On: September 09, 2005 14:57 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hoot! As always, wonderful work, m'dear. Characterisation; on point (especially Kakashi! I love how you described the ways in which he changes when he puts on that other mask, and how hard it is for him to come back. I could clearly see the discrepancies between Jounin-Kakashi and ANBU-Kakashi). Grammar, punctuation, mechanics; all perfect. It was wonderfully detailed. I loved all the information and insight you gave on the life an ANBU lives, and these types of missions. Real thought and deliberation was evident. I giggled to imagine stubborn mother hen Gai. Cute. I felt kinda sorry for the Hunter-nin kid. Kakashi was hella hard on him at first. But I guess you addressed that when you said that he changed when he put on the ANBU mask - again, true. That really came out here. Mask to mask, faceless face to face, two puppets with chakra strings running back to their respective villages. - Gah. I love that metaphor. Great fight scene. It flowed really well, and wasn't choppy and messy like others tend to be. It was very well described. Yay for blood and gore. And to round it all off, a bit of smuttiness and sentimentality. :-) I really enjoyed this….. Maybe we can get our heads examined together. :D. But seriously, awesome work. Keep it up! ~Sahara Storm P.S. Kakashi mulled over his students for a bit….that part had promise, and an almost unfinished feel to it. Maybe you can do something about he, Sakura and Naruto going to retrieve that lovable blue-haired b |
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