Reviewed By: VenusIsKnownForFlyTraps [MediaMiner Member] On: October 09, 2006 17:57 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 4 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
If you put more substance in it, make it go alittle slower, hook on some of the bigger points, and focus on the fact that Kai is little, emotional, able to be nice, love, pull pranks, have fun, etc then this could be a really good story. Right now it seems kinda like a research report(then Kai did this, then Tyson said that, then Rei was concerned with this), but this is actually a really good idea that--with alittle work--could be really really good. I don't know what grade your in, so I don't know if I'm supposed to be reading something professional or something by a second grader, but this isn't really top quality writing(no offence intended). Don't get me wrong; I like it and all, but it just needs alittle work. ~VenusIsKnownForFlyTraps
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