| "Tearin' Up My Heart" Reviews/Comments [ 6 ] |
Reviewed By: Anime Lady PIMP [MediaMiner Member] On: March 29, 2006 00:15 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wouldn't thet hurt if he doesn't let ya get used to it? I still love it though.
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Reviewed By: Kag/Inu Fan On: September 10, 2005 02:21 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 5 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Excellent story, I loved it! Definitely keep up the good work!:)
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Reviewed By: Hanyou_swimmer [MediaMiner Member] On: September 09, 2005 10:06 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
good story
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Title: Tearin' Up My Heart
Reviewed By: Megan Consoer [MediaMiner Member] On: September 02, 2005 16:11 CDT
Comment/Review:
I really like this story alot. Can you write some more chapters?
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Reviewed By: Thorns [MediaMiner Member] On: September 02, 2005 14:21 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hi! Pretty good, different.... but... just one lil' thingy... *coughs* I think you are trying to add a little sexy snazyness with some 'dirty talk'.... which is cool an all.... but... How you per-say... word it, is just too much... or wrong timing. You do it in a couple of your ficcys. Their feelings are going down hill like... eg. Her emotions we're all over the place, leaving her not knowing up from down. Intense pain racking threw every pore of her body... then suddenly.. she squeals like a piglet. "Fuck Me!" she giggles psychoticaly. Inuyasha's eyes pop wide open, ogling at the foul mouthed girl in suprize, then groans happily and continues humping away happily like an overly excited puppy with an unlucky persons leg. ... Okay perhaps not the best example! But... the whole suddenly says "Fuck Me!".... Doesn't seem to go right. Everytime I've seens it said in your fic's, it's put me into uncontrolable fits of laughter. Like I said your stuff's pretty good but... For the love of god the "Fuck Me!" Has to 1. Go, 2. Put in a more fitting place, 3. Added words, eg. "If your going to fuck me, Inuyasha, at least fuck me right." "Oh god/Inuyasha/Easter Bunny, fuck me, ugh" etc. Yada yada with chickens on top, you get the point? They say the same thing, they just... go with the flow. Me thinkers at least. Never trust the girl that's been eating a bag of fantales all night/morning. Sweet chocolate... caramel...mmm.... Happy story writing! Take care, Thorns.
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Reviewed By: kagome15 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 02, 2005 10:17 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
good story but what would be cool if u made another chapter but it was inyasha pov. and not kagome!!!! ^_^
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