| "Wounded" Reviews/Comments [ 13 ] |
Reviewed By: dennisud [MediaMiner Member] On: November 08, 2005 20:01 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm not A big fan of these sort of stories. I always look for the faint hope at the end to justify the Eva pilots striving to survive. But your writing here strikes a cord and I feel this is one of the better written Eva stories out there this year. The slow decline of Shinji's physical and mental well being makes me m ore anxious which is good! Great job so far just let it write itself. dennisud
|
Reviewed By: Malichite963 On: October 15, 2005 22:13 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very very good story so far. Very much liked the last chapter, R&A finnaly got together. Liked the lemon scene as well, very well put together, nicely detailed, but still kept with the good style the story set thus far. Looking forward to more. Both the story, and maybe a few lemon scenes, as long as they are just as well done as this one. Good luck and keep writing. Malichite
|
Reviewed By: black_talisman13 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 14, 2005 17:23 CDT
Comment/Review:
somehow I can't really believe that you only got 10 reviews for that awesome story! It is very difficult to find good ranma-stories lately, specially AU! But you did a great job and I just LOVE your story! Keep the good work up! I specially love the relationship between the two and I hope that you can create more of those great moments between the two! and I loved your lemon! it was really sweet and specially ranmas reaction was wonderful!
|
Reviewed By: Sariyona [MediaMiner Member] On: October 14, 2005 14:02 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow! I've always said Ranma and Akane's relationship would be different if she wasn't so mean to him...but I guess that's what helps make the show funny. Can't wait for the next chapter :)
|
Title: Paragraphing
Reviewed By: XStylus [MediaMiner Member] On: October 11, 2005 20:57 CDT
Comment/Review:
Please learn line spacing and paragraphing. Your story looks great at Fanfiction.net, but is nigh unreadable here. ^_^
|
Reviewed By: dennisud [MediaMiner Member] On: October 10, 2005 20:54 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
A good read and overall a good story but I would have thought with the trust Ranma has now In Akane he'd say those magic words! And I'm sure Akane would yell them out loud as a reply. Now if I'm reading this right, the Amazons aren't a threat anymore while Ukyo's still out there. Kuno now has a goon squad and I have the feeling that the next fight will be a doozy. In all that how will this relationship develop! I'm staying to see! dennisud
|
Title: Yowza
Reviewed By: Neon Ronin [MediaMiner Member] On: October 10, 2005 13:10 CDT
Comment/Review:
Holy Shamoley, that was intense. Interesting reversal of Ukyo's attitude as well; I'm guessing the likelihood of her showing up as an Akane rival is close to nil now. I'm still curious about what Nodoka's fate may have been, definitely want to know if the betrothal between the schools is gonna rear it's head- and after what those two just did, I doubt they're gonna fight it as much as the canon characters did. Pretty hot stuff if I do say so myself. Keep it up.
|
Reviewed By: clavira89 On: October 03, 2005 14:28 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*grins* no offence against blonde europeans taken... i found your story just recently (there aren't that much new(updated), good Ranma stories anymore - I'm switched to InuYasha - but lucky me found your story and I have to tell you: I absolutely LOVE it!!! hope you update soon(er, the sooner the better!)
|
Title: Keep it up
Reviewed By: Neon Ronin [MediaMiner Member] On: September 08, 2005 16:09 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
For an AU story this is quickly becoming a favorite of mine. I like the interplay you've got going on here with the older, semi-wiser Nerima crew. Not sure how things are going to go if and when the arrangement between Soun and Genma ever rears its head- but with the way things are going between R and A they might react more favorably to it. Keep it up, and if you could spare a glance at some of my work in return I would deeply appreciate it.
|
Reviewed By: PPMKatie On: September 06, 2005 05:49 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
LOVE this story! This is how they should have reacted when the truth of the curse came out. It's great to see it as an alternate universe too. I'm hoping that Ryoga, Shampoo, Ukyo and the others don't come and screw things up royally. Can't wait for the next chapter!
|
Reviewed By: jazzz On: September 05, 2005 19:24 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I guess I'm just a sucker for your style. Oh, well, I could do worse. I would try and give you some kind of constructive criticism, but I feel woefully inadequate for such an endeavour. Just give me more, will you?
|
Reviewed By: =>Not kNowN=> On: September 05, 2005 14:53 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Comment/Review:
great ranma fic.. one of the best i've read... hope u update soon!! ^_^
|
Reviewed By: Fanfic Fiend On: September 04, 2005 13:05 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Excellent fic, one of the best I've read in quite sometime! Hope to see more of it.
|
