Reviewed By: lo On: September 05, 2005 14:32 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
How you started your story was grea. But I feel a liitle lost when reading it. Try to create a setting, and when it changes, give some indicaions that it does. This is a good story, but it needs to fill out a little more. I want to know what is going on, and what others, or the POV is feeling and processing things. Keep up the good work.
|
