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Title: Just The Way You Are
Reviewed By: Lunar Ice Dancer [MediaMiner Member] On: September 14, 2005 20:46 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Awww, there first kiss!!
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Reviewed By: AerynsPistol [MediaMiner Member] On: September 14, 2005 15:02 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
AW!! Chapter 8 is soo KAWAII!! ^^ looking forward to updates! =)
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Reviewed By: shadowwolf_02 (nsi) On: September 14, 2005 11:05 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
i try to help if i can. :) i just wanted to point it out, nicely ( i think i managed to do it nicely) before someone got cranky with you about it. i'd hate for that to happen; people can be so mean sometimes. *sigh* one of your fave's huh? *blushes* tyvm, the dark cloud hovering over my head just brightened up some. i'm glad you enjoy my story, that really means a lot to me. hopefully i'll have the next chapter up soon. *crosses fingers* until then, i wish you luck on your writing endevours, and look forward to what happens next with this story.
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Reviewed By: InusDemoness [MediaMiner Member] On: September 14, 2005 02:45 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 6 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
Finally an author who wants constructive criticism and opinins! ~huggles~ Okay the spelling and grammar errors I found were in these sentences "You're always staring off into space anymore" and "If you likes you so much..." the wording didn't make sense in those. A few misplaced words here and there too. And I noticed that in the first chapter when they were leaving Kaede's hut it said the four of them were leaving, not really a big deal but we shouldn't forget Shippou and Kirara^_^. And not to ruin your plot or anything but Inuyasha can read. He steals and reads Kagome's math book in manga chapter 25. Really the only thing I didn't agree with in the story in my own opinion was Mama. I feel like if she didn't want to interfere with Kagome's life and force things to happen like she said then she shouldn't have said anything to Inuyasha about breaking Kagome's heart but not say anything to Seiji for being a bad influence. To me it was just very hypocritical of her to say "I'm not going to say anything to the guy guy who's trying to change Kagome's personality and is making her drink, but I'll tell you what you should and shouldn't do to her." But other than that I think this story is very well written and plot is not over bearing so I hope you update soon.
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Reviewed By: Hanyou_swimmer [MediaMiner Member] On: September 14, 2005 02:44 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
awesome story! i especially like that there is some actual character development on the part of Inuyasha. so many people just write him to be an idiot with no real feelings or emotions. I also like the fact that you didn't rush into the relationship, i have read mant stories were for no apparent reason inuyasha and kagome get together, it is such a breath of fresh air to read a story that doesn't start with kagome dating some guy from her time and end up in a hentai scene between her and Inuyasha a page later. the only advice i could give you would be to use a little bit more description and to set the scene a little more at the beginning of the chapter. But as i said before your story is amazing and you are an amusing writer. ~*~Hanyou_swimmer
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Reviewed By: Okaasan-7 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 13, 2005 21:51 CDT
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I'm really liking the story and looking forward to what's happening next. I like that Seiji is just an asshole not, apparently, a disguised youkai. I do have some quibbles. Kagome is in 9th grade. High School in Japan starts in 10th grade. Also, Friday would be a school night because they have half days on Friday so if they were to have a dance it would probably be Saturday night.
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Reviewed By: fallenangel7583~NSI On: September 13, 2005 12:53 CDT
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i'm glad you thought over what i said. The story really seemed to redevelop itself in this chapter. it was very well done. Especially how inu reacted to seeing Kagome scared of a movie. it's really ironic, and you hit it right on the head; she fights worse creatures then the movies could portray and yet they still frighten her. it's good though, it means that she is still sensitive towards those subjects and the human emotion of fear still resides inside of her. really, it's a good psychological analysis whether or not you realize it. bravo! keep it up! i'm interested to see what this kid does next.
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Title: Just The Way You Are
Reviewed By: Lunar Ice Dancer [MediaMiner Member] On: September 12, 2005 20:39 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
For some reason I almost feel very sorry for Seiji(whatever his name is). Almost.
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Reviewed By: vbollman [MediaMiner Member] On: September 12, 2005 18:20 CDT
Comment/Review:
great story so far. just make sure this idiot gets what he has comming. Keep up the good work and update soon please
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Reviewed By: fallenangel7583~NSI On: September 12, 2005 13:09 CDT
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great chapter! i'm reading this instead of sitting through philosphy. don't rush it, i'm starting to see things blur by. it's great that Kagome came to this rationalization but she seemd so attached...it's hard to let go that fast. not that i'm voting for kag/this dude...but make sure that he deserves what inu is about to inflict on him. i love inu being all protective, it's cute. especially when he's dumb to the idea that he really loves her himself. keep it up!
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Reviewed By: shadowwolf_02 (nsi) On: September 12, 2005 10:14 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
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i'm enjoying reading your story and nothing along the line of errors sticks out at me except for one thing. Kagome is in 9th at the beginning of the anime, not in 8th grade. other than that, great job! :)
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Reviewed By: fallenangel7583~NSI On: September 11, 2005 23:21 CDT
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wOoT!!! go inu! damn...i really want to see inu put the kid through a wall. i mean, i can understand where he's coming from and he's not evil...just has high expectations. damn...i feel bad for inu. can't even disphier his own feelings. double damn. i'm sure he'll figure it out though...kind of hard not to. it's cute how you brought hojo in. oh the purity...hehehe.
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Reviewed By: Rainstorm61879 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 11, 2005 11:36 CDT
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I like it. Not to fast not to slow and humor. I like the way things are developing. So when does he get the idea to try and read her diary? after all I'm sure that was atleast a major factor in his wanting to learn to read.
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Title: Just The Way You Are
Reviewed By: Lunar Ice Dancer [MediaMiner Member] On: September 11, 2005 06:41 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Nice to know everythings almost back to normal.
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Reviewed By: michael11 On: September 11, 2005 05:56 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Love the story and update soon please.
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