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| "Broken Glass" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Reviewed By: nindeoronra [MediaMiner Member] On: September 27, 2007 17:48 CDT
Comment/Review:
Excellent story! Loved Akane and Ranma's reactions to each other, which were both wonderfully done--especially Ranma discovering Akane out of bed. Great story!
| Reviewed By: Broken Glass On: December 30, 2005 14:21 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Such a beatiful story! I like the idea of going in deeper on what happened after the actual incident. I thought you stood very in character with each person and I love how, at the mention of Shampoo not wearing any underwear u_u, Ryouga and Mousse fell over with nosebleeds. The metaphors with the breaking glass was well done and easy to understand while still having a deeper meaning. I could really feel the cold Akane was experiancing and I have to admit, I never thought FULLY on what she was going through while in the doll body or how she was able to pull herself from life and death. Ranma's attitude towards wanting her to wear HIS shirt was cute and...well...hehehe squishy....while still giving me chills at his tone. Don't mess with what's important to him, that's for sure! And the ending was great as well. I was just waiting for him to come out and help her warm up ^.~ Though, you still managed to keep them in character, with Akane's first thought of him being perverted for doing such an abrupt, intimate thing. Well done and thank you for sharing such a well written story! Love.
| Reviewed By: dennisud2015 On: September 10, 2005 15:17 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Well, for a one-shot I am left waiting... I suggest reevaluating and thinking that this IS a nice forst chapter of a mulit-chaptered saga. dennisud
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