| "Realizations" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] |
Reviewed By: Kandy On: March 22, 2002 16:00 CST
Comment/Review:
I am glad someone spelled realizations and it forms correct. Thank You!! i like your story. and you know you should write more, so I am not going to tell you to. Like Nike...Just Do It! |
Reviewed By: Jay On: January 16, 2002 16:48 CST
Comment/Review:
You've done a good job of creating sexual tension. Continue. |
Reviewed By: Susan On: January 14, 2002 23:33 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
I love B/V get togethers, so feel free to continue. My only request is that you have them take their time developing a relationship, instead of them jumping each others bones in record time (alot of fics are like this). If you decide to continue, I know I'll review. Good luck. |
Reviewed By: Papa Bear On: January 14, 2002 21:59 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Your off to a nice start. Since they'll become intamite arund the end of the story, might I suggest you have them start off on a steady relationship and move on from there. One thing you'll want to consider is "will they be in character?" don't be afraid to improvise a little jsut not too much. When I mean improvise I mean let them show there emotions more when There isn't any company around to bother them. So if you decide to continue Good Luck! |
Reviewed By: DBZ Girl [MediaMiner Member] On: January 14, 2002 19:11 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really love this story, please continue |
