| "Sojourn" Reviews/Comments [ 8 ] |
Title: ch.5
Reviewed By: Library Surfer On: January 31, 2004 23:40 CST
Comment/Review:
I like the part when Bra notices how easily baited Vegeta is *^_^*'. I like Bra's interaction with #17 in both this chapter and also the Mirai version in ch.4...it is very interesting to explore him a bit. Again, your descriptiveness is entrancing ^_^. I look forward to the next installment of this story.
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Title: ch.4
Reviewed By: Library Surfer On: January 31, 2004 22:31 CST
Comment/Review:
Your use of description in everything from feelings to settings makes it very easy to feel 'surrounded' and 'wrapped' with this story...I am enjoying it so much. I like when she is reading Vegeta's face in the last moments here...interesting.
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Reviewed By: J.Stone. On: May 02, 2002 10:39 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
It gets better with each chapter, but it goes from one charater to another too fast, makes it hard to tell who is doing what and when. But I still liked it. |
Reviewed By: Lady Hella [MediaMiner Member] On: May 01, 2002 06:18 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hmph. When people review on this site, they don't leave much, so they? Hope this is a little bigger. Well, i think this is a kick-ass fic so far, with some great description and character reactions. I especially enjoyed the way you alternated between POV's, it was good to get an insight to what the others were thinking at various intervals.
The relationship between Bra and Gohan wasn't something i had anticipated when i first read the summary, though it was nice that you didn't kill him as it happened in the series/movie.
Another thing i liked was the #17 POV that you threw in, it was nice to see a little human emotion on the Android, even if he didn't like it. Are you going to kill him anyway? Well, i'm not going to question; i'll just wait until you get that far.
It's a really interesting fic so far, i'm glad TTrin recommended it to me. I think she reviewed you on ff.net. I would have reviewed there too, but i think this site needs a good kick in the ass for not stressing the 'review' notion enough. Don't readers know how much we depend on them? *coughs* Maybe i'm just being presumptious. Well, i'll be back to check on this one!!
Lady Hella |
Reviewed By: mizu megami [MediaMiner Member] On: February 09, 2002 16:51 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
plz plz plz continue. this is really geting good!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! plz put up more ASAP
:)mizu:P |
Reviewed By: frisbee On: January 18, 2002 09:53 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wonderful fic. can't wait for more. |
Reviewed By: celestejacobs [MediaMiner Member] On: January 15, 2002 13:16 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great story you must continue it!! I'm on the edge of my seat waiting to see what happens next! |
Reviewed By: Alexander [MediaMiner Member] On: January 14, 2002 21:34 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Kick booty. I would'a wrote more, but I was feeling lazy, and I am juggling writing my own fic and reading others. But I'll say it again. Kick booty. |
