| "Nabiki's Expansion or Why Mr. Panda Plays with a Tire" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] |
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Reviewed By: KelvinsChoice [MediaMiner Member] On: February 04, 2007 09:52 CST
Comment/Review:
Thank you. I wanted the elimination of Genma to be more abstract, also that Cologne and Happosai wouldn't give him a chance to escape. I wasn't sure where to go with Cologne's and Happosai's transformation. The three `kids` I had some ideas, but not enough for another chapter. You're welcome.
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Title: kinky
Reviewed By: leos On: September 21, 2005 23:23 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow, what an highly erotic story you wrote. normally i dislike abusive and rape. but this sooo different i endured that bits and wanted to know where this story goes. especially since i like Nabiki. and the akane bashing goes well with me. the critique is only about the end. here i somehow miss a more outwritten part about the demise and maybe the continuing relationships of the 3. intriguing was also Cologne. where is that going? I´d love to see a sequel or another story in this setting altogether. so, no more. thank you for the entertainment and your good imagination.
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Reviewed By: Lord_Raa [MediaMiner Member] On: September 13, 2005 08:44 CDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Comment/Review:
This is an interesting idea you have here. It's highly original and I didn't spot grammar/spelling errors but this one isn't flicking my switch. I had to stop reading because of work, but it didn't have the hook that made me want to contiue. It's a decent fic, but it's just not for me.
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