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| "Box of Treats" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] | Reviewed By: blessed_love15 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 12, 2005 20:23 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 5 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
SoW: I rated you a 7 in style because there was too much dialog and not enough imagry. What time of day is it? What's the weather? besides the room being dark, what else is it like? And so on... However, I love how you portrayed Akito, and how you described Kyo ("shocking orange hair and garnet eyes") S&G: Excellent, I didn't see a single mistake. O/C: I gave you a 9 because this story is looking to be pretty original, but not the most original thing out there. EF: Since this chapter was only the exposition of the story, there wasn't much to enjoy. Thereofre a 5 (for now) OR: I gave you an 8, which is pretty good for the first chapter. If you finish this story, I promise I'll rate the final chapter. Then it will be a better estimate (probably a higher one too ~_^) Keep it up! I'm curious. --.--.Ayla.--.--
| Reviewed By: japanesegirl4yuki On: September 12, 2005 16:58 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love the beginning of your fanfic. I'm glad that Yuki and Kyo aren't fighting as usual. How old are they when this story takes place. Scince I'm reviewing your story, can I ask you a question? Can you review mine when I put it on? E-mail me the answer @ rhee1@connecttime.net. I'd really like to hear from you and I really think that It's goin got be a great fanfic.
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