Reviewed By: Sakiku [MediaMiner Member] On: November 11, 2005 02:05 CST
Comment/Review:
Wow, an excellent idea - making all 5 of them immortals! I've never seen an GW/HL-crossover before, but I've got to say that yours is a really great one! But you might want to fix your prologue, it's all in one continuous paragraph, and that scares readers off (really, I wouldn't have read it if I didn't think that everyone deserves at least ONE review). So, your plot idea is fabulous, and those two chapters really drew me into the story. Man with sword and cult about horsemen? I don't think you've revived Kronos&Co., have you? And am I right to guess that Treize is an immortal, too? If that's the case, then I'd love to see the confrontation of the 5 pilots and him (somehow I've got the feeling that you're going to make him an older Immortal with all his fancy sword-abilities. Please don't kill me if I'm wrong!). I also like your writing style very much, especially Duo's monologue in the beginning. Gave me a great insight into what Duo's thinking, commenting on all the right stuff in Duo-manner. Well, I've got to go. I hope I can review your next chapter, too! Sakiku
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