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Title: chapter 5
Reviewed By: Dark Avenger [MediaMiner Member] On: December 30, 2005 04:30 CST
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o.o get well soon, hun. I wish I could hand you my muse for like 5 minutes. *snickers* Though he'd probably turn this whole thing NC-17 in about 2 mintues. He likes to do that, lol. Anyway, nice chapter. *drools* May I have that lovely art book? I have like 30 here at home and not one has any hot guys in it... more like grumpy old men. (No, seriously, they're all like over 60.) I know I'm pushing my luck, but any chance you could let me know once you feel better and do update? I'm going to book mark this, but no guarantee I'll find the update within a decent amount of time. I usually only check like once a month, if that, unless I'm told to check. ^_^ Anyway, you know my email address. One error in the chapter, no biggie - We'll publish these pictures tonight" (forgot a period) ~Dark Avenger
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Title: Chapter 4
Reviewed By: Dark Avenger [MediaMiner Member] On: December 30, 2005 04:08 CST
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oh my hell, I'm laughing my butt off about this. Poor Inu, but not poor Inu. *giggles like a school girl* Getting suckered into nude photos, ROFL, Kagome's gonna have a heart attack!
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Title: Chapter 3
Reviewed By: Dark Avenger [MediaMiner Member] On: December 30, 2005 03:46 CST
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Very nice chapter. I enjoyed it. Here's more beta stuff for you - She just hope that Hojo didn't ask her out on a date in addition to her plea for help. She crossed her fingers, and after school was out, she hurried her way to find him before he left. (hope should be hoped) (in the second sentence, it should be "hurried on her" instead of "hurried her") Hhe took them from him anyway, not sure when she'd ever use such things. (should be She not Hhe) She looked at him up and down... (at isn't needed) He had to stifle a content growl at that (contented instead of content) "Okay," s he finally replied, (there's a formatting issue here, has been pressed between the s and the he) ~Dark Avenger
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Title: chapter 2
Reviewed By: Dark Avenger [MediaMiner Member] On: December 29, 2005 22:03 CST
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Overall, a very nice feel to the chapter. He's uncomfortable, as he well should be. Kind of feeling alone and confused. I like Kagome's reaction to it all, very compassionate, but perhaps an inkling of the future to come as well. (I'm speculating now... >_
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Reviewed By: Dark Avenger [MediaMiner Member] On: December 29, 2005 20:02 CST
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I liked it so far, catching, makes you want to read more. (Just finished chapter 1, decided on a review per chapter if I can manage it.) Only thing I noticed that was nagging me, was one sentence. This one - Forcing a smile she said, "Okay," she said, and she walked back with him to the shrine. "she said" is in there twice. Just thought I'd let you know. I'm overly anal about things like that myself, so I let others know when I see it and know that they've had someone beta their story. Anyway, off to read the next chapter. ~Dark Avenger
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Reviewed By: Geany 101 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 22, 2005 16:24 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i love it from a writer t a writer ur graet up date soon pppppppppppllllllllllllleeeeeeeeeeeeeaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaassssssss
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Reviewed By: White Raven [MediaMiner Member] On: December 13, 2005 11:55 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
oh...my...god! this fic is soooo good! inu the underwear model? random... and what's up with that woman, she kinda reminds me(i don't know why) of that little woman in the incredibles. Also, the outfits you picked out for inu just had me drooling imagining it, and i completly understand how kags felt. I wish i could see him in those clothes (T_T) Anyways this is a really great fic, update soon!
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Reviewed By: cougiecat1 On: December 12, 2005 23:13 CST
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very good story. Kag and Inu both took being stuck rather well, though I guess dealing with their frustration would have been a full chapter without plot advancement, so it's not really worth it. I'm umm... not really sure what's going on with that modeling company... ummm... humm... Inu the underware model. Something just doesn't sit right with me... though it might just be me picturing that crazy woman coming to Kag's house and beging Inu to take more naked pictures. Can't really picture Kag taking that too well. Looking forward to relationship progression. Hope you fell better soon!
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Reviewed By: bayusandiw On: December 12, 2005 22:26 CST
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Where's the FanArt? ...*_*
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Reviewed By: yummy On: December 04, 2005 20:00 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
inuyasha naked yummy:P update soon.love it.
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Reviewed By: InuBaby369246, not signed on On: December 01, 2005 23:38 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I hope that you feel better, because I know that it sucks being sick. I'm now going to proceed to tell you how much I like this: I love this! I love it, I love it, I love it! You get the point? Well, I just hope that you update soon, bt if you can't it's just as well because I have to start studing for exams. Sooo. Again, I hope that you get well soon!
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Reviewed By: shatter the sky comes quietly On: November 29, 2005 11:21 CST
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Hope you update soon, this is great!! Inu as a model, he's certainly hot enough. Wonder what Sess would think of him doing this. I can just see a future Sess calmly drinking his coffee then spitting it out when he sees Inu on a page of a magazine.
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Reviewed By: inu_candy216 On: November 28, 2005 23:31 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
update!come on update. its soo good.
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Title: PLEASE!!
Reviewed By: puppy_ears On: November 25, 2005 14:29 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Please update really soon!! Inuyasha naked, huh? "..." *yum*
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Reviewed By: inu_candy216 On: November 23, 2005 23:35 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
update soon its so good!
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