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| "Harry Potter and the Dark Messanger" Reviews/Comments [ 15 ] | Title: Good Fic but needs fixing
Reviewed By: William0415 On: December 06, 2008 21:10 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
It's a good Fic but you need to finish chapter three it goes strait from arriving at platform 9 3/4 to chapter four and there already a Hogworts. But overall great fic. It's my favorite HP fanfic. P.S. I don't like Ron either.
| Title: What happened
Reviewed By: Fluffy-Sama [MediaMiner Member] On: June 06, 2007 22:19 CDT
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The end of chapter 3 is missing! Could you pretty please fix it i love the story.
| Reviewed By: INUYOKIA87 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 22, 2007 23:43 CDT
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good story.....I'm sleepy I'm gonns go to bed now. Ja Ne
| Reviewed By: DevinS On: March 15, 2006 12:57 CST
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How did Harry get so strong so quickly? It can take MONTHS to bulk up, yet he does it in a couple weeks! Of course, it takes Months for a Muggle to bulk up, don't know about wizards. ALso, if he was so strong, how could Sirius pin his arms down? Or is that to because he can use magic, wandless magic, was able to do so? You have sequel written already, gonna read that now, but so far cute story, but man, that ending, brutal, evil, and poor Cho.
| Title: Better
Reviewed By: Famouf Amof On: March 13, 2006 19:49 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Much better, loved the ending, should have read this one first but didn't feel like going back when I started reading Other World. Some screw ups in your writing, not starting a new paragraph when someone new talks in your first couple chapters, and Yes, Dover is on the coast, never heard of the White Cliffs of Dover? Probably why it was on the show you were watching.
| Reviewed By: TheRazgriz! On: December 02, 2005 19:40 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great story. The layout itself isnt that great, sometimes it gets a little confusing about whos saying or doing what. Basically, Harry builds a romatic relationship with Hermione. They leave for Hogwarts, Ron starts going slightly insane. He believes Hermione is a Death Eater. Ron ends up going insane and is sent to St. Mungo's. Later, Ron returns, and Hermione takes her realationship with Harry one step farther than he wants to, and they quit speaking to each other. They later make up, but don't continue with their relationship. O.W.L.s come, then later Death Eaters attack Hogwarts. (This is a highly condensed summary of the story) Death, violence, sex, love, and betrayal. Great story, hoping the sequel will be even better! What did the doe say when she came out of the woods? "Boy I'll never do that again for two bucks!" Oh, and by the way, all you other reviewers, please learn how to spell!
| Title: THANK YOU
Reviewed By: poorman89 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 01, 2005 00:21 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
thank you for finally writing a harry potter fanfic that isnt crappy and/or too short....and if you could please give me some links to other good HP stories
| Reviewed By: Jestaman On: November 28, 2005 13:10 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
You killed everyone! What the hell is up with that? And poor Cho, please tell me she was just faking! And Ron a Death Eater? Wats up wit dat? I can't believe it, but good story, so-so writing in the first part but got better in the latter half.
| Title: wow
Reviewed By: Yami Sora On: November 27, 2005 16:31 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
This fanfic is ... wow! But im gonna start of with the bad first (sorry). Your writeing is good, make that great, its just a little confuseing at times. Good things though, its well thought out, your keeping the chearecters in line pretty good and guessing what they dont show in the books (ex. how Hemonie reacts in an intament moment). Also the idea of giveing Harry an auctal job is pretty awesome. What about the derselys? I havent seen much of them. wouldnet they knotice this happening in there own house. I know this fanfic seems to be finished already but i was just wondering. Ok, thats all iv got to complain aobut right now lol. Il keep reading and will keep looking for more works done by you. good Job Random reader
| Title: ur story rox
Reviewed By: lost123 On: November 26, 2005 15:23 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wicked story... i'm only on the 9th chapter but it's really good! o and if ur gonna stop it DONT! it's really good...and well that's it
| Reviewed By: steelfether On: November 16, 2005 02:26 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This an original ider that i hope you are going to continue with. *PLEASE!* at lest revile the mistery girls identity if you are going to stop this story like some people do once they get sik of writting`~`*-*
| Title: Wow
Reviewed By: firemoonhalk(not logged in) On: October 27, 2005 02:56 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow, that's all i have to say... i like it, this is the first hp fan fic i've acctuly liked... lol. it's really long, but that's ok because of how good it is... i'll be looking forward to the next one, ^_^ Oh, and sorry about the to/too thing, it just bothers me for no reason ^_^;; keep up the good work!
| Title: sorries...
Reviewed By: firemoonhalk(not logged in) On: October 25, 2005 00:00 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
the story is awsome, good plot line so far, and it seems workable... but one little thing is bothering me, driving me nuts... TO, NOT TOO... too is like too much or me too, to is the one you want to use on most of thoes and it's just a stupid little thing like that i would notice... sorry, i love the story, but i thought you should know... to not too, and lets not even bring up two... sorry, just a pet peve... -sigh- but the story is great! lol
| Reviewed By: Garfie2000 On: October 03, 2005 21:11 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Very well writen, not all teenagers banging each others brains out, actually has something to read.
| Reviewed By: law916 On: September 30, 2005 12:18 CDT
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I just started reading you fic and I just wanted to thank you for finally creating a Harry Potter fic with some substance to it. I have been let down by most Potter fic, but your has been very enjoyable so far. I will write a review as soon as I finish reading your work.
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