| "Biding Time" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] |
Title: WHOA
Reviewed By: LW On: March 25, 2007 16:18 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hun this is brilliant! I didn't even know you had an account here! Surprise surprise ;p I don't even know what to say. I'm no writer so I can't give decent critique *lol* But I think you got the characterization down perfectly. Kudos!
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Title: nice
Reviewed By: Trynia Merin On: November 06, 2006 14:50 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Nice vigniette :D. It's neat to see you peek inside his head and let is see what makes him tick
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Reviewed By: debbiechan not logged in On: September 30, 2005 12:47 CDT
Comment/Review:
oh! This was such an unexpected glimpse into the Son home life! Your Goku was wonderful--he's so hard to write, and you got him! This really does beg to be a longer story, I think, but it works well as a peek into the Piccolo-Son family dynamic. Nice.
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Reviewed By: ilex9 [MediaMiner Member] On: September 29, 2005 23:34 CDT
Comment/Review:
Thank you. I would have sent this for beta, but I just had to get it away - I was being too anal retentive about it. It felt like an overworked painting.
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Reviewed By: El On: September 29, 2005 22:19 CDT
Comment/Review:
awwww. It's so cute. The characterization is great. I think you did a good job with Piccolo. Killing intent tempered with patience. I liked your Goku. Still sweet and innocent but not stupid. I also liked how he saw ways to get in some training without Chi chi realizing it. Very clever and well done.
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