| "The Doctor is in...sane!" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] |
Title: wow
Reviewed By: ategev On: April 14, 2006 10:57 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
please come up with qnother chapter soon.
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Title: I like your story
Reviewed By: Luna Kat On: January 17, 2006 01:27 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Great job on this story PLEASE! PLEASE! write the rest of your story!!!! Kat
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Title: FFARG Review Ch. 1
Reviewed By: Chibi Halo [MediaMiner Member] On: November 30, 2005 01:08 CST
Comment/Review:
Thank you for submitting your work to FFARG. You have an interesting concept here with your story. It works well for the comedy you are trying to go for. However, your chapter was a bit hard to read due to the way Mediaminer likes to format the chapters. It would be a good idea to manually add an extra line between your paragraphs so your chapter is easier to read. You handle your descriptions well but they could be better. For instance you do not need to announce the passage of time when you change scenes with Vegeta in the gravity room. It would be better if you mentioned the passage of time in the descriptive parts of your paragraphs. Also, I noticed one instance where you did not capitalize the first word in a sentence when you showed Vegeta thinking. It would be a good idea to give your chapters a good read through before uploading them to make certain there are no minor errors in your work. Once again, you have a good concept for your story and with a little extra time and attention to detail it can be made even better. Keep writing and keep improving. Thank you once again for submitting your piece to FFARG.
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Reviewed By: jesy On: October 23, 2005 18:42 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Cool!! I like this fic u should finsh it i reallly like to see wat happens.
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