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| "April 26th" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Reviewed By: Tuatha On: March 03, 2006 17:18 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Incredibly sad. I loved your description of the world's colour and the lines about Duo carrying beauty with ihm. I'd really hope you write a sequel to this one day.
| Title: FFARG review, Ch1
Reviewed By: White_Winged_Atlantian [MediaMiner Member] On: December 04, 2005 22:43 CST
Comment/Review:
Good morning and thank you for submitting to the FFRG, I commend you on your choice of fandom to write for. I like Gundam wing. You have excellent grammar, but I have a few things to note with characterization. For the first, Heero, even if taught to care again would not react to a death or loss the same way a normal person (say Quatre or Duo) would. He would very likely revert back to his old self with a regular kind of pain that courses through with some irregular flashbacks. And also, in a reflection story, you've done ok, but you can't mix up present and past tenses :: whirl:: :: said:: They don't go together. If you need, you should state everything in past tense that indicates Heero's intimate thoughts in italics. Good work and keep it up.
| Title: FFARG Review
Reviewed By: KACD2 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 17, 2005 00:45 CDT
Comment/Review:
Wow. That was a nice story. Sad, but comforting. I don't uasly read angnst, because I don't like felling sad, but you've got a beautiful story here. I honestly don't think you should change anything. Even in it's saddness, there's a sliver of hope. About the only thing you could do to it, would be to continue it, and maybe have him meet some one else, but that's only a thought. Keep up the good work, I look forward to reading more of your work.
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