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Reviewed By: Syd Slothy On: December 23, 2005 19:21 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hi!... I am really not meaning this as a negative comment (although it may sound like one) but I read a lot of fanfics and many people do this (even I made this mistake a lot when I wrote fanfics). You wanted to know what was wrong and I am really really really really sorry if you take this offensively because you are a really good writer and your story is really good but you kind of write your story as if you are writing a list. Everything happens so fast and with so few details that it seems to be only a dialogue and it lacks the mental image that goes along with a really high quality story. An example just to put things into perspective is how inuyasha and Kagome meet, for a moment dislike each other and then are suddenly best pals. I understand how they would have an immediate attraction to each other, but if I guy you just met called you a bitch/wench and you decided he was a jerk, would you be bet friends by the afternoon, discuss porn with him and let him hug you that night? As I said before I made this mistake a hundred times before and I am really sorry if this review upsets you. I hope you keep writing because your story is great and Merry Christmas (if you celebrate it)! ~Syd
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Reviewed By: PrincessAngel [MediaMiner Member] On: November 08, 2005 00:46 CST
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They are so funny. They act like me and my friends kinda. But we had to tone it down we used to go down the streets arguing and cussing at each other until one day one of my friend's mom saw us doing it. She let it slidde but said next time we would be so lucky.
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Title: YESSSSSSSSSSSSSS!
Reviewed By: Kisa Niwatari [MediaMiner Member] On: October 28, 2005 10:26 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i hope oyu don't mind but i added oyu on aim. and yeah, i loved this chapter (the most recent one for part one of the orientation). don't sell oyurself short! ^__^ what happened to rin anyways? maybe i missed a part of the story...oh well. love it!!
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Title: Chichi
Reviewed By: Kimberly P. On: October 25, 2005 20:21 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
WOW this story is very funny.I have to say that its going really good so keep on going. Love,Chichi. ^_^
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Reviewed By: inuyashasAngel00 On: October 23, 2005 19:34 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
im liking the story so far!! =D !! its funny and cute!!! :3 . please update sooooooooon!! :)
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Reviewed By: dudekiller(nsi) On: October 21, 2005 22:06 CDT
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this seems like an interesting story. it was confusing in a few parts but still overall good. please update soon, id like to see where you take this.
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Title: great
Reviewed By: angle54 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 20, 2005 21:00 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i love youe story and i hope you update soooooooooooooooon!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Title: great
Reviewed By: angle54 [MediaMiner Member] On: October 20, 2005 21:00 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i love youe story and i hope you update soooooooooooooooon!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Title: jeninuyashalover
Reviewed By: jeninuyashalover [MediaMiner Member] On: October 19, 2005 18:16 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love it so far. Keep up the good work, Update asap thanks
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Title: love love love lvoe love it~~~~!!!!!!
Reviewed By: Kisa Niwatari [MediaMiner Member] On: October 11, 2005 17:48 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
omg i told you i loved it!! please write more please?? great chapter!!!!!!! yeah kikyo is a bitch! she needs to DIE!!!!! anyways, please update soon!! yay!! i left the most reviews i am sooooo your biggest fan!! go me!! go you!! lol yay!!!!
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Title: yay!! i love this story!
Reviewed By: Kisa Niwatari [MediaMiner Member] On: October 07, 2005 19:47 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
oh my goddess! you must write more! i loved it and i wan tto read more please! and thank you for updating for me! i'm special yay! please more?? pretty please? thank you for your review!! you reviewed for me rite? i think you did...well anyways thank you!!!!! oh yeah i reviewed twice! i'm hyper cuz i want to read morte but i can't so i have to read it all again! i loved the porn tape thing! i laughed! it was funny cuz porn tapes aren't so bad when you talk about them...why do people think it's so wrong if it's so natural? jk!! well yeah please update as soon as you can! but yeah don't rush or you might not get any ideas! ohhhhh i'm impatient sorry! lol i loved it thogh keep up the good work! told you i'd check it everyday!!
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Title: lmao to comment below me
Reviewed By: author :] On: October 04, 2005 20:00 CDT
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haha awww thnx for the sweeet comment! ill update for you , hun ^^v
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Title: O_O WHOOOOOOOOOOA!
Reviewed By: Kisa Niwatari [MediaMiner Member] On: October 04, 2005 10:58 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i want to read more!! why'd yopu stop!! that sucks! write more please??? your on my fave list! so update! i'll be checking everyday! you knwo i will!! or maybe oyu don't O_O yeah well i told oyu i will so ther! ooh yeah! i win!! lol ok well update! great fic!
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Reviewed By: Kimberly Pollock On: October 02, 2005 18:35 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really Like this fanfic.Its nice. It reminds me of what happens in the real world. U gain some u lose some.
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Title: Stay strong
Reviewed By: kaykay01 On: October 02, 2005 17:50 CDT
Comment/Review:
Please please update!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! i want to know what happens :)
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