Title: FFARG
Reviewed By: Dee-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: November 12, 2005 18:17 CST
Comment/Review:
There were a few errors in the first paragraph. One "to" that should have been a "too" and a comma that could have gone before "falling" were two errors that I remember off the top of my head. Overall, I think that this story was a little too short to move me; however, I would like to read more about this character, and would suggest that you contine this plot a little farther. You definitely have a lot of room to go on with this protagonist, who seems very interesting, and this setting, which has such interesting professions as "Mediator". Thank you for submitting to FFARG, and good luck with all the writing! -Dee
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