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| "Echo In My Mind" Reviews/Comments [ 2 ] | Reviewed By: ToxicHathor [MediaMiner Member] On: June 20, 2006 08:14 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
hey, hey... this is good, i've never liked threesomes, but this one begged to differ. i hope you tell us who did that shit to yami, cute muffin. and if you need any arabic words' translations, email me, i'm from egypt. please try to update soon. Hathor... Ÿm›
| Reviewed By: sglily - nli On: March 11, 2006 23:31 CST
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Waiting for AFF? Kinda like me, eh? ; ) Don't hold your breath, darling! We'll both be blue! I'm glad you didn't wait to post your update. (Neither did I!) This is a fine story. I am enjoying it quite a bit - even though I am not a fan of Yami... especially when paired with Bakura; however, you have managed to hook me on your story! But, I have to say, my favorite characters you depict here are both Bakura and Mariku... I love the dialogue that each of the characters have amongst the others in your story but between B&M... it is just hot! Bakura mean and nasty... pretty bitchy in fact... Mariku... well... slutty! It's great! I love how Mariku purposely tries to (and more often than not) unhinges Bakura. The bantering between these two in particular is wonderfully wicked! Yugi... who is another rather annoying creature to me, is very well done in your fiction. I like him as an older brother who is devious and fiesty. Ryou... well, Ryou has problems, the poor dearheart! I especially enjoyed the chapter/chapters where Mariku walked in on Bakura pleasuring Yami unbeknownst to the two lovers and Mariku reaction in the shower... and then consequently the "confrontation" with Bakura the next morning when Mariku admitted to watching the act of love. Bakura's reactions were priceless... The new chapter was nice. I liked Bakura's rants... it wasn't too much of a surprise that he earned himself a bitch-slap for his runaway/foul mouth. I liked Ryou's little jabs at his older brother. Someone needs to pat the little precious on his back for riling up his brother so easily! The passionate/jealous/yearning kisses during the Spin the Bottle game were a hoot! Can't wait for the next update to see just what happens next especially since you left us with a little tidbit that the trio will be split up shortly... hm... Very nice story, dear!
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