Title: FFARG Review Ch. 1
Reviewed By: Chibi Halo [MediaMiner Member] On: November 30, 2005 00:43 CST
Comment/Review:
Thank you for submitting your piece to FFARG. You have a unique concept with your story here. I like how you take the poem and use each part of it to help dive deeper into who Kurama is and what he thinks of himself as both a human and a demon. You have a wonderful way of telling your story. I could imagine Kurama himself reflecting on who he truly is. I like how you had him explore the personalities he shows his fellow demons, his close friends and family, and anyone he goes to school with. You captured that soft gentle voice he has through your writing beautifully. Your chapter flows well and your pace fits the poem you used beautifully. You have a good grasp of grammar and wonderful way of telling a story. This is a very good start to a delightful piece. Keep writing and keep up the good work. Thank you once again for submitting your piece to FFARG.
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