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Reviewed By: ANGELBOY613 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 14, 2008 18:16 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
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Richie is supposed to be a good guy, ,super hero_you have him seducin' and actin' all slutty and getting off on it. He's supposed to be a genius--how smart will he look when he's beaten and raped for his behavior. You write 'fucked' up psychological people. He's got a secret identity to protect (and by not protecting it, he's also risking Virgil)-yet he leaves his house unlocked and has no security/surveillance hidden or seen.People just come in and out of his house without their knowlege--some of this just doesn't make sense. He gets caught coming in from being Gear by Ebon. Francis says he needs the cheatin' on the side because things between he and Richie aren't like they were_well hell, why don't they just talk to each other? Richie had said the same thing to virgil. Yet he still claims to be faithful only to Francis_but he flirts/plays games like a whore. Obviously in this AU, Richie Foley is not a genius. You wrote that they both make 'good' money at their jobs, yet you had them fighting over money as trivial as $20. Ivan caught some punk checking out Richie but didn't warn Francis-what's with that? They're supposed to be best buds, 'linked', etc... And what's with Richie talking down about Francis to Richie-saying they aren't individuals or something like that---but he's married to the man for 5 years and claims to love him. Lots of irritatin' stuff.
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Reviewed By: ANGELBOY613 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 14, 2008 17:16 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
I don't know why my review was cut off. I pulled that piece out of the story to comment on it_and the rest of the story; and to tell you how much I enjoyed 'Banditos'; but none of that got displayed after I hit 'submit'. Well there were lots of nice words that I can't retype now.
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Reviewed By: ANGELBOY613 [MediaMiner Member] On: July 14, 2008 17:13 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
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>>she was glad Virgil had his own plans, but there were definitely days when she felt she had to have him at her side. After all, it took two to make a baby. They hadn't really had a 'relationship' in a manner of speaking. They had just come to terms in that if one had an itch, the other would come over to scratch it. Frieda
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Reviewed By: im_alive On: December 30, 2005 12:51 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
On one note, yay I'm done! On another what kind of ending was that? It was just as bad as the ending of Wolf's Rain, I'm wondering what's happening next. He took the pills what for? Will Richie be alright? And what about Daniel? Is he still stalking Richie,and if he is does he know about Richie's condition? I'm hooked and now I'm left craving for more, no fair.
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Reviewed By: im_alive On: December 30, 2005 11:54 CST
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Dangn' it I knew it. Stupid Ivan! Stupid Richie for not stoping Ivan! Stupid stupid boys! The only one I can stand is Shiv, that poor boy.
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Reviewed By: im_alive On: December 30, 2005 11:24 CST
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I kinda liked this chapter, it was like a follow up was happing. I do feel for Joe the poor boy, and did I tell you how grossed out I was with the whole eyeball thing? I'm a little mad at Ivan about not letting it go abd Richie is probably stupid enough to go with it. All I know is he better be careful because you never know about a curse especially if you're superstitious.
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Reviewed By: im_alive On: December 29, 2005 17:14 CST
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Oh I really liked this chapter it was somewhat sweet, well at least for this fic. I kinda like John I mean he's really helping and not being a prick, that's not something I would expect for being Francis's parol officer, you know the type. And I definatly liked Ivan's admittion, I knew he was hooked.
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Reviewed By: im_alive On: December 29, 2005 16:12 CST
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O_o! Why I so loved Danny before, but no he's just as crazy as Joe. And Richie yes I love him as a character but I can't help but feel bad for Francis. I mean he's trying he's best and you can really feel the love from him, or is it more of a neediness? Either way Francis is trying and Richie is only feeling for him when the guilt becomes to much, he sucks the jerk.
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Reviewed By: im_alive On: December 29, 2005 16:12 CST
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O_o! Why I so loved Danny before, but no he's just as crazy as Joe. And Richie yes I love him as a character but I can't help but feel bad for Francis. I mean he's trying he's best and you can really feel the love from him, or is it more of a neediness? Either way Francis is trying and Richie is only feeling for him when the guilt becomes to much, he sucks the jerk.
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Reviewed By: im_alive On: December 28, 2005 11:28 CST
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I'm back at least for this chapter. I was just thinking the whole misery loves company thing and thought if I was going to be depressed I might as well make it count. Anyway like always I love it. I also barely noticed how much the F-word is thrown around. I didn't think anyone but my aunt could use that world like every few words in a sentence, it's amazing. And oh my that Joe, he's a little scary. One chapter down and a few to go, maybe tomorrow.
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Reviewed By: shampoo marea 2 On: December 13, 2005 10:31 CST
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what this is the end???? you can`t finish it here!!!!!! i wanna know how it continues!!!!!! lovely story ..keep writing this way i loveeeeeeeeeeeee it too much, it`s my adicction
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Reviewed By: im_alive On: December 07, 2005 18:30 CST
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First off let me tell you I'm very happy with all the updating, it's all christamsy. Second, even though I like the updates I didn't read any of them and I probably won't be reading this fic for awhile. It's not to long or anything I love this fic and the longer the better, butI need to stay away from anything dark right now. I'm going through a bout of sad, but as soon as I'm better I'll be reviewing like no tomorrow. So many reviews you'll be sick of me.
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Reviewed By: shampoo marea 2 On: December 07, 2005 16:44 CST
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nooo francis hit him!!!! mooooreeee.and Ivan what a coward left runing.
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Reviewed By: shampoo marea 2 On: December 05, 2005 14:36 CST
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daniel raped richie?
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Reviewed By: im_alive On: November 28, 2005 20:38 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I tired reading this chapter and I had to stop. Nope I'm not going to read it at least not yet. That's right I'm saving it for later, and after that later comes around I'll leave a proper review.
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