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Title: Fanfic #2!
Reviewed By: YGO Cupid [MediaMiner Member] On: December 10, 2005 18:12 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow! That was short, but very good! I would like to see the second fanfic (Huge YY/Y fan ^_^) Keep up the good work!
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Reviewed By: Shadow Raven On: December 10, 2005 02:38 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
THANKS for finally updating! ^__^ It was a great story! *bows to authoress* Oh Yeah...and I like Fanfic Idea: 2 Ja Ne! Shadow Raven P.S. Keep up the Writing! *hugs for everyone*
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Reviewed By: dragonlady222 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 08, 2005 07:18 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I liked the chapter and I like your Yugi/ Atemu idea simply because I like that pairing better. I want to see more of their romance. I liked it because Yugi made up his mind. I beleive in love at first sight and I know that many people have sex when they first meet. Good job.
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Reviewed By: Nobodynow On: December 07, 2005 18:13 CST
Comment/Review:
Nice idea but the writing could use a little work. For 1 the entire thing went to fast, even good friends take a long time to admit they love each other, why would Atemu and Yugi who're complete strangers have sex in less than a week? Also the scene where Atemu comes back to life was...blah. Like "The street just got ripped up by a mutant parakett, have any lip gloss?" In the manga Yugi totally freaks out about having another soul inside him. Having a 5000 yr. Pharaoh appear after reading a scroll he didn't think would work merits a little more expression don't you think? And along with the scroll reading, I believe someone who deals with the supernatural of a culture goes 2 ways, totally into it or very skeptical you didn't give him any thoughts on the fact that he was reading it, once again just blah, nor did you show any of Yugi's emotions of finally finding the tomb either. He's been searching for it for a long time you'd think he'd be a little more excited. Overall it was too much action and movement and you didn't give much of Yugi's or Atemu's thoughts we don't know why they did what they did in very much depth. Also you need to work on the characteriztion, Yugi didn't really show any of his typical quirks or any quirks at all. He seemed too normal and almost bland. Basic advice is spice it up a little, make more conflicts and give them more personality! You could put in other names and it could be used for any anime. By the way sex doesn't spice it up. Thank You. DK;{ |
Reviewed By: Amelia Lancer On: December 07, 2005 13:55 CST
Comment/Review:
I don't think I know enough about Kisara to vote fairly, but I did like this chapter (even if it was basically just sex). Keep it up.
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Title: ailisa
Reviewed By: Darkangelzero [MediaMiner Member] On: December 07, 2005 13:15 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
My Slave for All Time this is my vote. and i just love the Awakening!!!
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Reviewed By: Cherazz On: December 03, 2005 23:19 CST
Comment/Review:
Yay! Great chapter! I love the drama! Poor Atemu, I hope Yugi will make it up to him =D I can't wait for the next chapter ^.^
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Title: PLEASE!!!
Reviewed By: xXDarkLightXx [MediaMiner Member] On: December 03, 2005 21:12 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Come on next chappie! HURRY!!! ... Sorry, nvm, dun wanna pressure u. Hehe, can't wait for the lemon! ^.~ Hehe. =^.^=
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Title: AAAAUGH!!! O.o
Reviewed By: xXDarkLightXx [MediaMiner Member] On: December 03, 2005 21:07 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
*Accidently reads the part where Tea and Yugi were, ahem* O.o OMFG!!! I'M BLIIIIND!!!! AUUUUUGH!!! OMG! I'VE GONE BLIIIIIIND!!! >.< AHHHHHHHHHHH!!!! *Screams about being blind seeing tea and yugi together for an hour or so...* Ugh... @.@ Yay! I can see now!!! YES! ATEMU WON! ^-^ Well, obviously 'cause this fic is supposed to be Atem/Yugi. They are SO cute together! Keep on writing! *or I'll probably go nuts and sum1 will have to knock me out with sumthing* :P R&R PEOPLE! AND NO FLAMIES!!!
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Reviewed By: Amelia Lancer On: December 03, 2005 10:11 CST
Comment/Review:
A most interesting turn of events. As bad moments go, that was a pretty good one.
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Reviewed By: dragonlady222 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 03, 2005 05:45 CST
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
That was great. I guess Atemu won after all. I don't think Yugi is confused about what he feels any more.
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Title: darkangelzero
Reviewed By: Darkangelzero [MediaMiner Member] On: November 30, 2005 19:13 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
you are so mean to just leave it like that we want to see some more action. but anyway this is a great story and hope you update soon!!!
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Reviewed By: dragonlady222 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 28, 2005 11:31 CST
Comment/Review:
Good chapter. I am glad he found his way back, I'm also kind of glad he met Tea. I want Yugi to end up with him and not Tea with maybe them being good friends.
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Reviewed By: Cherazz On: November 27, 2005 21:27 CST
Comment/Review:
Wow! Amazing work here! There's some yummy sexual tension here that needs serious attention =D I'm so psyched for the next chapter! I'm very curious to see who's at the door :)
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Reviewed By: Amelia Lancer On: November 27, 2005 14:44 CST
Comment/Review:
Ah, the ever-reliable doorbell. I'm starting to hate those things. Nice chapter all around, though! Keep up the good work.
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