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| "Awakening" Reviews/Comments [ 47 ] | | Pages (4): [ 1 2 3 4 › » ] | Title: By: HeavensChaos
Reviewed By: Chaos Blade [MediaMiner Member] On: January 29, 2007 21:12 CST
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Woho! I'm reading My Slave For All Time I thought I recognized the style, and I was right! Why no updates? The other story have you too busy? It's not finished yet and its quite nice. Maybe I'll (and others)will see a ending? Hope to read more of your work. p.s. I've reviewed your other story under the name Chaos Blade. ^-^
| Reviewed By: Koishii No Tenshi [MediaMiner Member] On: January 24, 2007 03:10 CST
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T_____________T you haven't updated this fic in so long T____T. Please update it when you have time
| Title: Yay
Reviewed By: JH4E On: February 04, 2006 16:19 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ooh! Yugi called Tea a bad word x_x *giggles* Yay! My guys had smex! I happy! ^.^ Ooh pls update soon. I wish to know what the secret is....
| Title: Sakura-Laurel
Reviewed By: Sakura-Laurel [MediaMiner Member] On: January 13, 2006 12:54 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 7 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 7 of 10 Comment/Review:
I liked it a lot. It was a bit quick for my tastes, but rather well-written. I really wish that this site had a story alert button. That would make this so much better, and I'd be able to tell when the next chapter's up. If you could, please email me at clomister@sailormoon.com when the next chapter's up? Thanks.
| Reviewed By: dogmatix_san [MediaMiner Member] On: December 22, 2005 03:59 CST
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Okay. Thie fic is well written. Good grammar, spelling, etc. The premise is interesting, and you handled a more adult Yuugi pretty believably. Atem is... well, there's good and bad. Some of his reactions, like automatically assuming that he has control of the situation, ring true. Other things don't quite work. He's adapting a bit too easily, the language barrier has been completely ignored, and one thing that really struck me was that Atem assuming a lot had changed in 5000 years (and Yuugi doesn't say anything about how long Atem was dead, how did Atem know it was 5000 years?). Nope. He's an Egyptian. Egypt was ~founded~ on the very principle of stability. Even if you set it in the Old Kingdom(5000 years ago), that just reinforces it, because the Intermediate periods(large upheavals) haven't happened yet, so Atem would probably either assume everything was still the same or that some things might have changed, but not much. Also, even given that Atem knows his contemporaries are dead, he shouldn't automatically know or assume that Egypt as he knew it is basically gone, yet he makes no effort to return home to Egypt. He doesn't even ask where he is, even though it's obvously a foreign country. And tomb robbers were severely punished(as in, staked out to die), and Atem would react much, much more strongly to Yuugi robbing Atem's tomb(if only because tomb robbers tend to rob more than one tomb, so Yuugi might have plundered others). Decent fic, needs some work.
| Reviewed By: dogmatix_san [MediaMiner Member] On: December 22, 2005 03:58 CST
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Okay. Thie fic is well written. Good grammar, spelling, etc. The premise is interesting, and you handled a more adult Yuugi pretty believably. Atem is... well, there's good and bad. Some of his reactions, like automatically assuming that he has control of the situation, ring true. Other things don't quite work. He's adapting a bit too easily, the language barrier has been completely ignored, and one thing that really struck me was that Atem assuming a lot had changed in 5000 years (and Yuugi doesn't say anything about how long Atem was dead, how did Atem know it was 5000 years?). Nope. He's an Egyptian. Egypt was ~founded~ on the very principle of stability. Even if you set it in the Old Kingdom(5000 years ago), that just reinforces it, because the Intermediate periods(large upheavals) haven't happened yet, so Atem would probably either assume everything was still the same or that some things might have changed, but not much. Also, even given that Atem knows his contemporaries are dead, he shouldn't automatically know or assume that Egypt as he knew it is basically gone, yet he makes no effort to return home to Egypt. He doesn't even ask where he is, even though it's obvously a foreign country. And tomb robbers were severely punished(as in, staked out to die), and Atem would react much, much more strongly to Yuugi robbing Atem's tomb(if only because tomb robbers tend to rob more than one tomb, so Yuugi might have plundered others). Decent fic, needs some work.
| Title: MORE!!!
Reviewed By: YGO Cupid [MediaMiner Member] On: December 20, 2005 01:08 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really love this story! (huge yy/y fan alert) Please continue with it.
| Reviewed By: Amelia Lancer On: December 19, 2005 18:48 CST
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Sounds interesting... I admit, Tea's not my favorite character, but I still feel bad for her. That was cold. Yeah, Yûgi has his own torments and everything, but...harsh much? x.X
| Reviewed By: dragonlady222 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 19, 2005 13:49 CST
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I really like this a lot. I want to see what happens next! Great job.
| Title: NOOO!!!!
Reviewed By: xXDarkLightXx [MediaMiner Member] On: December 11, 2005 21:41 CST
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IT HAPPENED AGAIN!!! I'M SO SORRY!!!
| Title: Shoot....
Reviewed By: xXDarkLightXx [MediaMiner Member] On: December 11, 2005 21:40 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I put up the same reveiw up TWICE!!! I'm sorry! I keep doing that for some reason! >< I'm sorry, it's just my computer... Or is it me....? Oh! I got a new computer!!! Um, just wanted to tell people that, even though it's nothing of importance... Heh, sry about earlier, I just get too hyper! I'll TRY and lay off the sugar... *hides sugary snacks behind back* 0:) *whistles innocently and slowlly creeps away...* Uhhh, I have important, uhhhh, stuffs to do, so, uhhhhhhh, bi! X)
| Title: Shoot....
Reviewed By: xXDarkLightXx [MediaMiner Member] On: December 11, 2005 21:40 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I put up the same reveiw up TWICE!!! I'm sorry! I keep doing that for some reason! >< I'm sorry, it's just my computer... Or is it me....? Oh! I got a new computer!!! Um, just wanted to tell people that, even though it's nothing of importance... Heh, sry about earlier, I just get too hyper! I'll TRY and lay off the sugar... *hides sugary snacks behind back* 0:) *whistles innocently and slowlly creeps away...* Uhhh, I have important, uhhhh, stuffs to do, so, uhhhhhhh, bi! X)
| Title: I agree! Fic #2!
Reviewed By: xXDarkLightXx [MediaMiner Member] On: December 11, 2005 21:35 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I agree with YGO Cupid, DarkAngelZero, and shadow raven! Weeeeeeee!!!! YAY!!!! *giggles* Sorry hyper! Fic #2 please! Um, people, please vote! ^-^ We'd all love it if you did! And please, no flames! Um, and early Merry Christmas to all reveiwers and yaoi fans! Hehe, yeees, one day we will control the world!!!! *laughs insanly intill sum1 knocks her out* X.x *is still hyper*
| Title: I agree! Fic #2!
Reviewed By: xXDarkLightXx [MediaMiner Member] On: December 11, 2005 21:35 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I agree with YGO Cupid, DarkAngelZero, and shadow raven! Weeeeeeee!!!! YAY!!!! *giggles* Sorry hyper! Fic #2 please! Um, people, please vote! ^-^ We'd all love it if you did! And please, no flames! Um, and early Merry Christmas to all reveiwers and yaoi fans! Hehe, yeees, one day we will control the world!!!! *laughs insanly intill sum1 knocks her out* X.x *is still hyper*
| Title: LOL
Reviewed By: xXDarkLightXx [MediaMiner Member] On: December 11, 2005 21:26 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Awesome chapter! (Yea, I'm a huuge yaoi YY/Y fan!) Hehe, I was blinded for a while and in a little shock, but I'm fine now! ^-^ LOL! Keep on writing! Wow, nobodynow.... Uhhh, pretty long and descriptive reveiw... O.o Yo! YGO Cupid! How's it going! ^-^ Is your new fic goin' good? Hope so! Yeah! I hope you make another fic, um, maker of awakening.... I'm sry, I forgot your name... Hehe.... >.>;;;;; I'll learn it though! ^-^;;;; Please, PLEASE! NO FLAMES! (not that anyone has really flamed though) R&R PLS! I really look forward for your next ficcie! Go you!!!! ^.^ *waves a banner with HUGE letters that say, GO GO GO!!!* ^-^
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