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| "Couldn't Belive" Reviews/Comments [ 3 ] | Reviewed By: INUYOKIA87 On: December 28, 2005 16:07 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
IT WAS VERY SIMPLE BUT REALLY GOOD!
| Title: FFARG Review
Reviewed By: MissMusicality [MediaMiner Member] On: November 28, 2005 16:34 CST
Comment/Review:
What a lovely poem! Thank you so much for submitting it to FFARG for a review. I enjoyed reading it, which is impressive, because I often don't enjoy much of the poetry I find in Fanfiction. Really, it flows well, has good word painting, and I like the "halo" touch...showing a contrast of the blood and Kagome's innocence. You have a few spelling errors, it would seem...Like "realise" should be spelled "realize" and "loose" should be "lose" and, "fears" rather than "frears", "breathe" rather than "breath" and "believe" rather than "belive." So, you probably want to change your title to "Couldn't Believe" as well. And, I'm not sure if you wanted to leave out a period at the end or not. It's in your poetic liscence to do so. But really, spelling errors aside, very nice poem, very touching. If you would like, it would be nice to add a bit more on the severe pain that Inuyasha was feeling...it was probably agony, and descriptions of the turmoil would be very effective. Good job, keep up the good work, and thank you again for your submission!
| Reviewed By: joey 29328 On: October 22, 2005 11:34 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
awwwwwww that poem was so sweet and sad..but you did a great job on it ^^. I liked it. ^^ It was deep and awesome.
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