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| "No Fear" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] | Reviewed By: Izumi Ryu [MediaMiner Member] On: May 23, 2007 12:46 CDT
Comment/Review:
No fear, alright. It's kinda hard to have fear when sleep hasn't come to you in weeks...I get the feel of a man that's just dazed about the distant world around him. Sleep tends to take priority when you're so tired, that even a nuke would fail to get you to react.
| Title: FARG
Reviewed By: White_Winged_Atlantian [MediaMiner Member] On: February 12, 2006 01:28 CST
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Well that was dark. There's nothing I have to complain about this, it was really an enjoyable read no matter what kind of length it was. It didn't put me to sleep (hahaha) and it didn't make me skim through. It was good. There were bits where it got *slightly* repetative, but overal it wasn't that bad. Mostly people who are tired complain nonstop about how tired they are, so that was very in character. It was good. There is no real concrit I can give you, sorry dood. Keep writing, keep submitting. ~ Sisi,
| Title: FFRG Review
Reviewed By: Sueric [MediaMiner Member] On: December 07, 2005 06:09 CST
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I really wanted to find something to critique you on, since you submitted your work to FFRG. I tried to find something; honestly I did. The problem? There isn't a lot to pick on. There are a couple places where the wording seemed a little stilted, however I have to wonder if you intended it that way since it rather fits the story, itself. Nothing noticeable in the grammar department - and if there were things, they weren't significant enough to jerk me out of the story. The action sequencing was clear and concise; the mental imagery was quite vivid in my mind. Overall, just a very solid piece, and while I didn't really give you a 'critique', per se (as I do not believe in picking at a comma just to have something to pick on), I must commend you on a very well-written one shot.
| Title: Neat story
Reviewed By: Niobe Jones [MediaMiner Member] On: November 20, 2005 08:07 CST
Comment/Review:
I really love the beginning of this story. It sounds like me in the mornings. The whole tongue in cheek thing worked well for it. I admit that I was a little confused when it came to the fight sequence and who the woman was. Or was it two women. This is what I get for reading these first thing in the morning on only my second cup of coffee. I thought this was really well done though. I am glad that it placed.
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