| "Life's Loves" Reviews/Comments [ 9 ] |
Reviewed By: kira15 On: July 05, 2006 11:28 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hey this is a great story it is the most interesting one i tink well excpet the one about kaogmes secret and the new student!
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Title: COOLIO!!!
Reviewed By: Shippo Gal 101 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 30, 2006 18:20 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
PLEASE KEEP ON WRITING!!!!!!
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Reviewed By: inukag_dreamz On: May 15, 2006 20:35 CDT
Comment/Review:
well you took long to update.....
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Reviewed By: pickle juice On: November 14, 2005 01:03 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I really liked this chpt. i hope kag decides to go w/inu. please UPDATE sooooooon!
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Title: AWSOME!!!!!
Reviewed By: bankotsu_rox2000 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 10, 2005 18:43 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
AWSOME!!!! O MY KAMI U WERE GRATE!! PLZ UPDATE!!!
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Reviewed By: Dragon of Darkness On: October 31, 2005 06:11 CST
Comment/Review:
great story please update sooon
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Reviewed By: luxurious [MediaMiner Member] On: October 30, 2005 02:11 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I love your story so far. I'm a sap for love and the way you describe things is very sweet. I hope you post another one soon. =]
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Reviewed By: mm-reviewer [MediaMiner Member] On: October 29, 2005 20:06 CDT
Comment/Review:
Alright, I read the whole thing. Again, I think your story is good but you have some grammar and punctuation problems with the dialogue. When someone speaks within double quotation marks, it is part of a whole sentence and should not be treated as separate. For instance, if I say, "This is an example," and you should pay attention to it, I do not place a period after the quoted text nor do I use a capital letter after the quotation marks. Here's another example: "Inuyasha! Look out! There's incorrect grammar ahead," she yelled. Notice that I use a comma and not a period before the ending quotation marks and I did not capitalize 'she'. Using a question mark or exclamation mark is okay too. Here's an example: "No, Kagome! It's a puncutation problem!" he shouted. Do you see what I mean? Pick up a paperback novel and see how it treats quoted dialogue. It will help you. I like your story and I hope you get more reviews, but you need to fix the problems I have listed and put a space between each paragraph. Also, you should change your settings to allow people who are not logged in to leave a review. I hope this helps. Good luck.
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Reviewed By: mm-reviewer [MediaMiner Member] On: October 29, 2005 19:17 CDT
Comment/Review:
Your story is good but you need to make it easier for people to read on a computer screen. Put a blank line in between each paragragh. It's easier on the eyes and people are more likely to read it if you make it easy for them. Also, I wouldn't post more than one or two chapters a day. People see a long story with no reviews and they think "Hmm, that story must be really bad since it has no reviews." If you post gradually, you will build a following and get more reviews. As it is now, your story may not get much attention because the paragraphs are jammed together into one long block of text and it's hard to read. Couple that with the lack of reviews (most people won't realize you posted all at once) and you have created a situation where people won't read your story. I suggest you edit the chapters to make them easier to read and if you post another story, post it gradually. I hope this helps. Good luck.
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