Reviewed By: NeekerBreeker [MediaMiner Member] On: November 03, 2005 08:39 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 6 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Nice little PWP. I really liked some of your descriptions, even though it had a bit of a hastily written feel - some punctuation's missing, for example. One thing I'd like to correct; "okairimasu" doesn't mean "welcome home"; I think the phrase you're looking for is "okaeri nasai", or just "okaeri" (less formal).
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