| "A Visit in the Night" Reviews/Comments [ 7 ] |
Reviewed By: lo On: August 30, 2005 22:54 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
THis was great. It was sweet how they were both struggeling with thier emotions, but once they got past all that the story was hot!!! Great job!!
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Reviewed By: 2x1Freak [MediaMiner Member] On: April 08, 2003 20:52 CDT
Comment/Review:
Mwahahaha! 2x1 baby! ::purrs:: Love it. Keep up the 2x1 goodness! |
Reviewed By: Gemini Maxwell On: December 02, 2002 18:55 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow! For your first gundam yaoi lemon, that was AMAZING! Your grammer is impeccable, which I love. The only thing I cant STAND is bad grammer! Also, your own comments aren't really needed, I for one wouldn't have noticed the lack of shoes. ^.^ Your diolauge is really good, too. That was fantastic, write some more! |
Reviewed By: Suzume Tori On: October 05, 2002 23:28 CDT
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Comment/Review:
har har, it was wonderful **purrs**
MOREMOREMORE!!!! **wantz 2 c heero cunfessss his luv**
**drools** best lemon i have read in.... a long, long, time **drooldrooldrool** |
Reviewed By: plutosenshi2000 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 31, 2002 13:57 CDT
Comment/Review:
It was a good story.
I think you should try to avoid adding to many of your own coments into it, like when you explained why Duo didn't have any shoes on. I think it would be better if you said earlier that Heero noticed Duo didn't wear any shoes or socks and wondered why. After all you explained later in the story that Duo was hiding in Heero's closet.
Another thing, I'm not that familiar with the characters myself, but I know one thing, Duo's motto is "I run, I hide, but I never lie". So maybe you should try to lead the conversation about how Duo got into Heeros' apartment a little differently. |
Reviewed By: Oriana X. Myst On: February 08, 2002 15:47 CST
Comment/Review:
Um... I put "golden brown" only time I ever mention the word "golden" without adding "brown" was one line only.
Oh well... thank you!! |
Reviewed By: tempestwing [MediaMiner Member] On: February 08, 2002 14:32 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i love the story, but there is one thing: Duo has chestnut brown hair not golden blonde that is quatre and frankly there is a difference between those two if you want to know email me at tempestwing35@hotmail.com ok ..... bye |
