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Reviewed By: Lady wolf rider of the forest On: August 17, 2007 16:59 CDT
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i love yor story but your spelling is quite bad
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Title: Nice... ...
Reviewed By: Rainy_Dream [MediaMiner Member] On: January 09, 2007 06:05 CST
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Yo. I remembered somewhere at a site called ShinchanInuyasha Fanfic Site, I've seen tis story. But, it will be a Sess/Kag fanfic... Duh. Nice, and pretty suitin. ^_^
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Reviewed By: hyde/jackie On: November 17, 2006 11:52 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This story is really good so far. I do hope you get the chance to update soon. I so wish to find out what happens next.ake more chapters ok
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Reviewed By: shadowkado On: November 17, 2006 11:46 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
OH MY GOD!!! this story kicks ass i lve sess/kag and the plot was a new one in a very good way PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE POST A NEW CHAPPIE
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Reviewed By: evilflynmonkeys1 On: November 17, 2006 11:42 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
i love this story, can't wait for next chapter please update soon
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Title: Inconsistent
Reviewed By: Vyncent [MediaMiner Member] On: November 05, 2006 16:10 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
There is something missing, or just a bit off in your story line. At the end of Chapter 14, Sesshoumaru catches Kagome before she can hit the ground as she faints. He can hear the thud of Inuyasha's body hitting the ground, as he also passes out. However, at the beginning of Chapter 15, you have Inuyasha walking over to pick her body up off of the ground, and a once awed Sesshoumaru silently raging in jealousy because she stopped both of them from fighting each other. So what gives? Did Sesshoumaru catch her as she fainted, and then just drop her on the ground? If Inuyasha fainted, he had a miraculous and immediate recovery with no explanation! If he fainted, how did he walk over and pick her up? If Sesshoumaru caught her before she could fall, how did a passed out Inuyasha walk over and pick her up off of the ground? This discrepancy breaks the flow of your story and pulls the reader out of the setting that you had set. This story is and has been quite good, but the inconsistency in the flow of the story needs to be improved upon.
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Reviewed By: Aoidragon On: June 23, 2006 03:22 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 5 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
hey look! ^^ seperators! now i dont have to look to find out where the scenes switch! :D hooray! i gotta say, i love your story. i'll even write down your name (rare occurance) and come back to review once in awhile. thanks for the great story! ^^ (btw... your spelling is atrocious..[no offense :p] only one word that gets on my nerves.. its 'once' not 'ounce', kk? ^^ not meaning to be rude! :D) GL getting over your writers block! ja ne~
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Reviewed By: kagsinred~not login~ On: June 20, 2006 00:17 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Sess Kag! Sess Kag! Sess Kag! Update! Sess Kag! Sess Kag! Sess Kag!
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Reviewed By: kittycat925 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 19, 2006 23:54 CDT
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Yay! You finally updated!!! Ooooh, so he challenged her to a "sparring match"? and I agree on a Sess/Kag pairing. Good uppie, even if you left off with a cliffhanger, can't wait to see how the fight goes, and who wins (though it'll most likely be Sesshy). Update again soon if you figure out what to write!
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Reviewed By: linjcon [MediaMiner Member] On: June 19, 2006 17:26 CDT
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I recently found this story. It's very well written and I like the idea for the story. For Sess/Kags pairings would work best.
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Reviewed By: Kurai Kyusobin [MediaMiner Member] On: June 05, 2006 23:46 CDT
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Sess Kag! Sess Kag! Sess Kag! Update! Sess Kag! Sess Kag! Sess Kag!
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Title: Dude
Reviewed By: Kurai Kyusobin [MediaMiner Member] On: June 05, 2006 21:05 CDT
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I like the way you started it. As for the thing we talked about I can help you if you want. It's not bad at all.
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Reviewed By: kittycat925 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 03, 2006 18:31 CDT
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I was following with your updates on this, and I love the fic...thing is it says that the status is "completed" yet it just kind of ends...are you planning to continue with it more, or just cutting the life support from the story? If you are still writing please: UPDATE SOON!!!!
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Reviewed By: animegirl2005 [MediaMiner Member] On: May 03, 2006 22:49 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this is a great fic i really really enjoyed reading this keep up the great work update soon
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Reviewed By: McSlave44 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 30, 2006 22:44 CDT
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A very interesting story. Keep it up! The only thing that is wrong is that thier is some mis-spellings. I love it
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