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| "Blood & Tears" Reviews/Comments [ 184 ] | | Pages (13): [ « ‹ 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9 10 11 12 13 › » ] | Title: Sacredarrow22
Reviewed By: Sacredarrow22 [MediaMiner Member] On: March 17, 2008 00:46 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow! I am actually reading this story for about the third time (I read it for the first time during the summer of '07 I believe). I love it. I am actually in awe of your writing skills...and not just on this story, because I believe I have read every other one you have written. I have never been disapointed! This is my favorite though. It is so well written and there are no holes in the plot, which tends to happen in a lot of the fanfics I read (especially the longer ones), and all the character are well rounded. I can actually see the entire story play through my head as if I was actually watching a movie. I honestly cannot find one thing I do not like about it. I just wanted you to know that. Also, I have read many fanfictions and, while there have been many that were absolutely terriffic, out of everything I have ever read, this definitely comes in at number one for me. I hope you keep up with your writing. I am looking foreward to reading your next piece.
| Reviewed By: charnika On: November 29, 2007 10:05 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
this story is really good im having a hard time peeling my eyes away from the computer right now lol well keep up the great work. ive read almost all of your work and i must say im impressed and i enjoyed every single bit of them and was never once dissapointed!
| Title: Chapter Three
Reviewed By: sylphstarwind [MediaMiner Member] On: July 20, 2007 01:34 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Yup, I'm beginning to like this more. If I was writing this, I probably would've skimped on the medical/diet details, since I don't know much about it. So it's neat that you can write about it so well. I'm also beginning to see a possible different side to Sesshoumaru. Like, it's not that he hates Inuyasha, so much as he can't accept a half-demon as easily, and looked down on him. But here it kind of shows a desire to change it. I'm also liking the care Inuyasha is giving Kagome. I thought all the guilt and and crying was a bit much for someone like him, but him taking care of her like this is sweet. Only complaint is that Sesshoumaru's being a bit too motherly still. He's like a counselor or something, giving all this advice and such. When it was life or death, him helping them despite his personality and beliefs wasn't so bad, but now... Well anyway, I fully enjoyed this chapter. Despite my criticisms, I think you do pretty respectable work.
| Title: Chapter Two
Reviewed By: sylphstarwind [MediaMiner Member] On: July 20, 2007 01:01 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 7 of 10
Overall Rating: 6 of 10 Comment/Review:
Hmm, the medical procedures were pretty interesting. They sound like they could be accurate, and it was fairly in-depth and impressive. But a couple more things stuck out to me. Japanese in English stories annoys me a little, things like "I'm a baka" (is that even the correct use?) or "I was such a hentai". It sounds so out of place. You also repeat some things quite a bit, like the whole situation with Kouga. Maybe when someone's explaining it, you could just say "Sesshoumaru explained what had happened" or something, or use some other wording than what you've already used multiple times. If it's the same old "if he couldn't have her, no one could," and "Kouga and fifty wolves blindsided them" and such, it gets pretty repetitive. The description about "we would come to another village and I would hear the whispering again," is repeated too much, too. I also noticed "Keh" and "honorable" were used excessively. I know I'm complaining a lot but these are all things that could be changed so that your story can be improved, in my opinion. I hope you don't take offense.
| Title: Chapter One Review
Reviewed By: sylphstarwind [MediaMiner Member] On: July 20, 2007 00:30 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 7 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 8 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 6 of 10
Overall Rating: 5 of 10 Comment/Review:
I don't want to come off like I'm attacking you, but I wasn't quite happy with your fanfic, and I'd like to tell you why. The main thing is that the characters are OOC (out of character). I just don't see Kouga going from loving Kagome, to not caring about her at all or even treating her like a person. Maybe his love isn't very deep, since they haven't spent that much time together and it was sort of a spur of the moment love, but still, such a complete change was a bit of a shock. I think it would've been more believable if the rape was him being desperate and going overboard or something, but him saying he's going to fuck her brains out and kill her babies was just...not very believable. He turned into a horrible person in an instant. Sesshoumaru came off all wrong, too. I agree that he might help Kagome and Inuyasha so he could kill Inuyasha himself, or because some bit of compassion (maybe pushed by Rin), but he was way too kind and tender. Taking them to a safe place, licking their wounds, caring for them day after day - it's just not something I'd see him doing. I can see that you've made it out that it's necessary, but I don't think he'd do it so nicely or excessively. Also, the "this Sesshoumaru" thing didn't really work when it was used in a fairly serious English story. Lastly, Kagome seemed really...er...loose? easy? towards the end there. She was a virgin until a couple days before, and now she's a rape victim, but she goes and does that to two guys all of a sudden. Goodness. Other people seemed to enjoy this, and that's just fine. But all I could think about while I was reading was how unlikely all this was, how OOC the characters were acting. Although, I can say some positives - some of the lemon content was good, the overall writing was well done, and it was interesting. And you may have had characters acting more like themselves by the time you finished this story, so all this may only apply to this part.
| Reviewed By: dragon205 On: July 18, 2007 18:02 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is by far the BEST InuYasha Fan Fiction that I have ever read. Great Charecterization. Great Story. Everything was great.
| Reviewed By: unistar [MediaMiner Member] On: July 02, 2007 22:10 PDT
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excellent story... i loved it... along with your other Inuyasha/Kagome stories... amazing plot... great work... good job!... keep it up!
| Title: Tears from tohru!
Reviewed By: tohruxkyoxyukilover [MediaMiner Member] On: June 21, 2007 17:08 PDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This made me cry multiple times it took me almost a week to finish but i enjoyed it sooo much thank you for takeing your time and completing this for us! If you happen to be writeing anymore anytime soon please contact me immediatly! i have read all of your stories and am im[passionatly impressed with how much you have but you creativity into it you would do great as a romance/novelist!!
| Title: WOW!
Reviewed By: theknightcallsmyname [MediaMiner Member] On: June 14, 2007 13:46 PDT
Rating(s):Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I am completely wowed by your story. I've been reading it nonstop during my spare time for 3 days. I truly enjoyed each and every minute of the ride. While I don't mind threesomes in stories I read, I am picky about who's involved. I wasn't sure if I would like Kagome being shared between InuYasha and Sesshomaru, but by the time I reached where it happened, I understood they way you intended to handle it, and I think you did an excellent job. The rape at the beginning was brutal and horrific; you expressed that well, without overdoing it, in my opinion. I guess my only critique would be with how fast Kagome seemed to recover emotionally. The nightmares seemed to be the main problem she had. I understand that she completely trusted InuYasha and Sesshomaru, and the manner of her rape played into it, but I still think she recovered too easily and too quickly. But that's just my opinion :) Now I'm off to read the story you recommended at the beginning of this one, and then I'm back to check out more of your stuff. You're definitely a favorite InuYasha author of mine now :)
| Reviewed By: wudelfin [MediaMiner Member] On: January 24, 2007 22:40 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
vry well written. kudos to you
| Reviewed By: avoria [MediaMiner Member] On: November 24, 2006 22:56 PST
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I am in total love with your fics... total love... And I totally agree with the Sesshomaru as Rin's father thing!
| Title: OMG
Reviewed By: Chase65 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 19, 2006 09:40 PST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I have never been so moved by a fic before. I laughed, smile & cried(several times!). The characters were well developed along with the storyline. I could picture everything as a little movie in my head. I liked the way you handled the Songa/Miroku dynamic with respect to InuYasha. Well done! And the relationship between the 2 brothers was amazingly well done! I enjoyed jumping from 1 era to another and was never lost. You've got quite a little gem with this one!! Thank You ;)
| Reviewed By: omg On: November 15, 2006 15:27 PST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
wow u got me horny as i dont kno wat i want to do the inu brothers im over here jackin off to ur fic
| Reviewed By: sessy_lover [MediaMiner Member] On: November 05, 2006 09:25 PST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
loved it i have been reading some of our other fanfics so i read this one and i could not put it down you showed definitly get a award for this one well hope to read more from you in the "future" hopes its not in 500 years lol sends writing vibes
| Reviewed By: sessy_lover [MediaMiner Member] On: November 05, 2006 09:25 PST
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loved it i have been reading some of our other fanfics so i read this one and i could not put it down you showed definitly get a award for this one well hope to read more from you in the "future" hopes its not in 500 years lol sends writing vibes
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