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| "Jiikron: Legend of the Two" Reviews/Comments [ 9 ] | Reviewed By: devildice708 [MediaMiner Member] On: August 24, 2006 23:21 CDT
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Nice cliffer hanger and thanks. For a minute there, I thought you lost your drive to even finish this story before it got started. =P
| Reviewed By: Silver Armada [MediaMiner Member] On: July 11, 2006 01:25 CDT
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80~~~ *Wipes drool off of chin* Write more. NOW. Silveh demands it. XO! *Demanddemandcoerce* If I don't get more of this soon, I'll... I'll... Well, there will be no more of this *Shimmyshimmyshake*, THAT'S for certain. (But really, I love it and I want to read more. Please? D,= )
| Reviewed By: devildice708 [MediaMiner Member] On: April 07, 2006 02:41 CDT
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I've got a question for ya, Neko. I was just wondering, why does Andsaca want Vitani dead? I have a feeling you won't tell me, but hey, can't blame me for trying. =P
| Reviewed By: devildice708(didn't feel like logging in) On: February 28, 2006 17:47 CST
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I'm glad I was able to inspire you to get back into writing, Neko. Anyway, since you want an honest critique on your horror scenes, I'll volunteer. Overall, it was a good horror scene but it wasn't anything that made my skin crawl or scared me half to death(but then again, not much scares me. XD). Vitani's fears of returning to the village added to the realism, too, and the blood was definitely a plus. Kona's reactions to the scene was a nice shock to me, seeing as not much gets to him, but then again...he is still a teenager in this story. XD All in all, it's a decent horror scene, but since it's your first, it has a lot of potential of becoming better. Keep working at it and keep up the good work. ^_^
| Reviewed By: VendettaTheory [MediaMiner Member] On: December 25, 2005 21:25 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 7 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
I'm not sure of what to say as to the plot of this story right now. I suppose the one word I would use is interested. The antagonist is obviously trying to conquer the world (an admirable goal!) but I can't put a bead on what any of your protaginists are doing. Shiva (an angel, a demon, a bug-girl?) is a vivid character. Poison spreading wings is an intriguing concept indeed. Your writing style is very mature and your descriptions are writing without being too 'purple'. The dialouge is witty though it could use polishing in some spots. Especially before Shiva interupts your Dark Lord. The talking played out rather predictabily to me. While I'm no paticular stickler for spelling and grammer I couldn't find an error in your writing. Congratulations on that for it is more than I can manage. Keep working on this, I'll be reading.
| Reviewed By: devildice708 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 23, 2005 22:01 CST
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Damn, did I mention that Shiva was hot? Nice chapter as always, Neko. ^_^
| Reviewed By: devildice708 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 09, 2005 18:23 CST
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A nice chapter, Neko, but it was on the short side. It's not really a big deal, but I suppose that is how you write. I like how there is already plans of betrayal amongst the ranks of villains and such. I hope you update soon. ^_^
| Title: Hey hey!
Reviewed By: forechunkukee [MediaMiner Member] On: December 04, 2005 00:28 CST
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Very cool beginning. In a word, I'm intrigued. All this ties in together somehow...can't wait till I actually see how it does. Love the use of Latin in it. Very slick. Update soon! d('')b
| Reviewed By: devildice708 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 03, 2005 19:02 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 9 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
A good start, Neko. I don't have much to say except...I envy Kona. -_-; Update soon, okay? ^_^
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