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| "Into Sesshoumaru's Mind" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] | Reviewed By: rabidfang08 [MediaMiner Member] On: December 28, 2005 16:42 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wow, it's so cool! It really sounds like something Sesshoumaru would think. =D I really like it! Btw, did you know that saying things like "it infuriates I" isn't correct grammar, even if it sounds like it is... it does sound Sesshoumaru-ish but I don't think he would really talk like that... I mean it's not like it really matters but I just thought I'd point that out. Sorry for being annoying and a dork. I like your fic though! =D
| Reviewed By: Azelle [MediaMiner Member] On: December 16, 2005 21:09 CST
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I really think that you've conveyed Sesshoumaru in a true manner, and not OOC, honestly. He's very proud - as he should be - and doesn't come off as too much of a softy when talking of his revival of Rin, since he dislclaims it with the "just a test" reasoning. :D We all know that he thinks of her as more than just a pesky human who trails after him. Even if he only really cares for her slighlty more than he does for Jaken, that says something, since Jaken, although low on the totem pole, is a full youkai (albeit with meager powers and prowess), which in Sesshoumaru's own reasoning would logically put the little imp above Rin in his "deserves to live in such close proximity to This Sesshoumaru" ranking. Power, although it was much of what the poem was about, simply feels hollow, and only when you have him speaking of Rin does he show what he is worth, since most of what he has gained power from in the past has come from an inanimate, outside source, where as the inclusion of Rin gives a nice closer to the poem itself and the fleshing out of Sesshoumaru and his expansion as a emotion growing and evolving individual. Great job!
| Reviewed By: Azelle [MediaMiner Member] On: December 15, 2005 21:17 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Ooh, very nice! I love the original story line. Well, at least I've never come across one like it, but it's a good spin on how wishing upon the jewel can go terribly wrong. And I don't think you have Kagome crying too much or Inuyasha being overly OOC, at all. They're going through a very trying time and emotions would be high for both, hence the "outbursts." :D Great job. I can't wait for future updates. :D
| Reviewed By: Kagura615 [MediaMiner Member] On: November 24, 2005 10:16 CST
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I love your writing! This really has heart put into it and I admire that in a writer. Again, good job!
| Reviewed By: vbollman(nsi) On: November 24, 2005 08:27 CST
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I get first review~dances~ I like. really i do. well written. oh an by the way thanks.
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