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Reviewed By: Kyona [MediaMiner Member] On: February 22, 2006 01:23 EST
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Awesome. I like the plot twists and what-nots. How Tohru just shows up and starts begging for Kyou's freedom, that was unexpected, but welcome. I wonder what'll happen next.
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Reviewed By: The oh so wonderful TH who is too lazy to log in! On: February 21, 2006 23:47 EST
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SARAH!!! didn't anyone tell you that cliffhangers are bad!!! and this is quite the cliffhanger! hehehe. I love it so far though! Akito is soooo evil ::smacks!:: and baka neko! ::smacks him too!:: can't wait to read more, you rock!
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Reviewed By: Kyona On: February 03, 2006 00:31 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 9 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 9 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
This is, by far, the best Kyoru fanfiction I've ever read. I loved it, absolutly. I am especially happy that this was written by someone who knew just as much about Furuba as I do, and I think that made the story even more enjoyable. It's terrible to read fiction about the period in time you used, and having the person know absolutly nothing about the characters or what's going on in the plot at all. Anyway, I can't wait for the next chapter. I'm highly looking forward to it. And I guess you can say that I am definatly a fan of your writing.
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Reviewed By: DawnFire881 [MediaMiner Member] On: January 10, 2006 21:35 EST
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oh my gosh i loved this story! i love kyou's reasoning for going to bed early every night, to look at photo albums and watch Tohru sleep. And I don't think there was any OOCness, I think if that were to happen it would go something like that. It was so beauitful and special and had feeling and emotion, and wah the ending is going to make me cry though! I'm glad there will be more because I can't take sad endings! heehehehe. keep up your amazing work!!
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Reviewed By: BriAngel On: December 27, 2005 04:40 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
loved it! must have more! ^_^
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Title: Wow...
Reviewed By: Shiichanchick On: December 18, 2005 01:29 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Oh man... that was so good. It wasn't like a lot of hentai where it's just, "Ooh let's do it." It was more. There was so much emotion and sadness. As for OOC... don't think so. If Tohru and Kyo ever do it in the series, that's definitely how it would be done. One thing, though, is that I hate sad endings (my own fault; not yours) so if you made a nice second chapter to have her fight for him and it end up that he stays with her, that would be awesome. If not, I understand. Great job!
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Title: Wonderful Story
Reviewed By: LadyLark [MediaMiner Member] On: November 28, 2005 12:25 EST
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This is a good little story that tries hard to be a PWP and really fails. But in the right way. There is plot here as well as characterization and I really think you have set yourself up well if you want to continue with this. Which is why I can't consider this a PWP it goes somewhere and resolves some things as well as complicates others. That is a story not smut. The lemon was very tastefully done, a little soft for my tastes as you know. But still very well done. The writing is very fluid. There are a few weak spots. The beginining especially. Once you get into the story and the characters start talking you get into the flow more. If I were to pin-point it, I'd say the bath scene is where things take off and grap your reader. I liked Tohru's and Kyo's characterizations here. They have grown from where I last saw them and there is enough staticness in their situation to make me believe that Tohru would do something like that and Kyo not shy away. What you might perceive as OOC works. And it works well, because the characters have grown and they are now facing a deadline that they weren't before. That changes people. I also want to commend you for writing outside of your normal comfort zone, I think that is really brave of you and you did a great job. Thank you for sharing with us!
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Reviewed By: kandi_heartz On: November 28, 2005 01:16 EST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
uwaaahhh!! wow that was really good! lol so much better than anything that i could write...i tried a bit because a fic im writing requires tohru to be pregnant [0__o;;] but...i ended up not going into any details TT_TT. lol. keep writing! god i wish i could steal this now~!! dont worry i wont ^.~ keep writing! i cant wait to see what kyou's gonna end up doing!
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Reviewed By: LadyBlade (NSI) On: November 27, 2005 00:11 EST
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Wow! I'm completely oblivious to FB since I've seen only the first episode, but I loved this ficlet! You rock Sari!
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