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| "Espoir" Reviews/Comments [ 4 ] | Reviewed By: Post-Ap Fan On: April 17, 2006 10:55 CDT
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It's hard to find a post-apocalyptical story around here that can capture my interest, but this one does that. I believe it has some influence from Evangelion, my favorite anime, and the author also managed to find new themes and ideas, plus he's created his own interesting characters. I particularly like Kei and Kuris, who so far have the most interesting side story going on. The only problem is, of course, the huge amount of small spelling mistakes. I don't know what program you've been using to write, but if you try MSWord, it can automatically correct any typos. That aside, this is a great story, and im anxiously waiting to see more chapters and to read again the old ones once you've cleared the grammar issues. Good job, and please continue with the story!
| Reviewed By: Uniasus(who is being lazy) On: March 13, 2006 20:41 CST
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Excellent story, I admire your knack for character. If you still need a beta, I'm open. contact me at uniasus@hotmail.com.
| Title: FFARG: Prologue
Reviewed By: Dee-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: December 28, 2005 19:29 CST
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"Espoir" has an awesome prologue. It was a lot of what a prologue should be with enough hints to keep readers interested but with enough black holes to keep that air of mystery up. I felt as if I was being dipped gently into a promising story. The prologue for "Espoir" also had a few small errors in spelling, and it would have benefited from a few more commas here and there; however, overall, it was a great way to start a story. Happy holidays and thank you for submitting to FFARG! --Dee
| Title: FFARG Review
Reviewed By: Pahhur [MediaMiner Member] On: December 12, 2005 18:50 CST
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Alright, good job for setting the story up. It could use a bit more character description, what are these two wearing? How does the lab smell? What does it look like? That sort of thing. Otherwise this gets the mood and plot going well. Thanks for submitting to FFARG.
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