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| "Harry Potter and the Other World" Reviews/Comments [ 5 ] | Reviewed By: Garfie2000 On: March 23, 2006 16:05 CST
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Loved this story! But a Cliff Hanger... You evil! I didn't come to see if you had made a sequel to your first book and am glad you did! HP&HG Forever!
| Reviewed By: DevinS On: March 15, 2006 14:30 CST
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That was so touching! Harry and his parents, or just having his parents things close to him. So nice, and the beggining, then what happens, what a twist, don't want to give it away though, but great story, so touching, and Hermione and Harry forever!
| Reviewed By: Famouf Amof On: March 13, 2006 19:45 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
Myeh, short, didn't read the first story though. Alright writing, and nice twist, as good as your other stuff, but going to read the other story now.
| Title: FFARG Review
Reviewed By: Pahhur [MediaMiner Member] On: December 10, 2005 09:33 CST
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Okay, you need one thing. Some form of antagonist. The story feels too flat, with very little of anything going on. You could probably sum up the entire first half of this by just saying, "With a few creation spells Harry managed to take care of himself for his first day in the Muggle World" What you want to do is have some form of antagonist, even if it's surviving in an unfamiliar world. However I don't see any of that going on. You do seem good at building a romantic relationship, but you seem to have a slight tense problem. Though it isn't as serious as other ones I've seen, (and I've seen some pretty bad grammer) it's still a problem that should be fixed.
| Reviewed By: James the Lesser [MediaMiner Member] On: December 02, 2005 16:14 CST
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Sorry people, I wrote a review on my own story, didn't mean to, was writing one for another story I had read but had to many windows opened, got lost. Sorry! Already sent in to get it removed, now just need to find the story I was going to review.
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