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| "Of Knights And Scoundrels" Reviews/Comments [ 6 ] | Title: FFRG: Chapter 3 Review
Reviewed By: Dee-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: April 30, 2006 11:44 CDT
Comment/Review:
Chapter three had good flow, was well-written, and had good characterization. I really enjoyed it. The only errors I saw were one mispelled word (brunet) and sometimes capitalizing "sir" and sometimes not. Never been a big Allen fan, this chapter was especially enjoyable because, as Lord Archive reviewed, Allen is so out of his element ^_^. I look forward to seeing where you take this story! Thank you for submitting to FFRG!
| Title: Hmmm......
Reviewed By: nekuyasha [MediaMiner Member] On: March 23, 2006 21:03 CST
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 9 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I have to say that I truly enjoy this fic. It's an interesting dive into the backstory of Allen that I don't think many people would take so much time to look at. I really like how you delve so deeply into Allen's POV and incorporate a younger, less jaded Allen into this story. He's still somewhat idealistic and expectant when it comes to the military and his position in it. I look forward to reading more about his mis-adventures at the fort. ^_^ NekuYasha
| Title: FFRG Review
Reviewed By: Pahhur [MediaMiner Member] On: February 12, 2006 18:06 CST
Comment/Review:
Alright, I noticed a few possible typos, a good beta will fix that up though. Otherwise, it's a very solid story, characterazation is probably your strongest aspect here. It got a little confusing at times, but I'm not familiar with the series in the first place, so I guess it would be. Either way a very well done piece of work, just grab a beta fer the typos (at least I think they're typos) and sumbit to FFRG again.
| Title: FFRG
Reviewed By: White_Winged_Atlantian [MediaMiner Member] On: February 12, 2006 00:40 CST
Comment/Review:
What I noticed first off was that your story has good grammar and nice flow. The characterization is fairly on, and really it's got good description too. There's no reason that it shouldn't be regarded as tip top story material. I liked it, but it was hard to get into, I wasn't hooked in the beginning and I found myself skimming over things. That's not what you want. Your story needs soul and spirit to it. I liked it. I like Gaddes very much. Keep writing and try to work that soul in. Thanks for submitting to the FFRG. ~ Sisi
| Title: FFARG: Review of Chapter 1
Reviewed By: Dee-chan [MediaMiner Member] On: December 28, 2005 20:13 CST
Comment/Review:
Yes! Yes! "A Doored Kiss" was an amazing way to start "Of Knights and Scoundrels"! In fact, this chapter would be an amazing way to start any story. It had good grammar and spelling--not to mention wonderful vocabulary and "A Doored Kiss" was TRULY, TRULY well written. This was an amazing chapter. The first paragraph in itself was great, not to mention funny. The writing style of this story definitely appeals to me! There was only one mildly confusing clause: sorting through his clothing at the same time as he did it to his agitated thoughts Overall though, I really appreciated this chapter and wish you the best in any future work. Thank you for submitting to FFARG and have a great holiday! -- Dee
| Reviewed By: Lord Archive [MediaMiner Member] On: December 22, 2005 10:28 CST
Comment/Review:
A well crafted story detailing one of the less shining parts of the life of the legendary Sir Allen of Austria. There are a few details out of place, notably Allen's affair with the princess happened while she was married to the Duke of Fried, of which the Duke was ignorant of that liason and the simple fact the son the princess bore wasn't his child. Do watch the use of special characters, like accented e, as they have a nasty habit of becoming computer barth. Also titles used as part of a name are capitalized like Sir Allen and Sergant Gaddes. It is quite fun seeing Allen stuck out of his element trying to make good of a bad situation he put himself in.
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