| "No Such Thing As Fate" Reviews/Comments [ 28 ] |
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Reviewed By: starblade2007 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 30, 2008 13:52 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 8 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 8 of 10
Overall Rating: 8 of 10 Comment/Review:
While I absolutely love your work, you seem to have some inconsistencies. You stated that they didn't know each other's names, but...if you read the first chapter, you'll see that they do. In Chapter 2, Sesshoumaru has to remind InuYasha about the dinner at the parent's house and suggests that InuYasha brings the girl home, but only if she's 'not a whore.' Then in Chapter 3, it says basically the same thing again, as if you yourself didn't remember typing that. Just wanted to point that out to you!
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Reviewed By: Sara_bell_from_hell [MediaMiner Member] On: May 06, 2008 08:18 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Wonderful story i haven't read a story of yours i dont like yet. But Update soon please.
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Reviewed By: rinabeana [MediaMiner Member] On: August 16, 2007 01:46 CDT
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i love the story but there is one thing you kinda mixed up Well I'm sorry uh…" Inuyasha paused trying to think of her name.. " I don't know your name." He stated with an embarrassed chuckle, he'd been too distracted that morning to ask for her name.. or her number. " That's because I don't think I told you my name." Kagome stuck out her tongue at the hanyou then giggled lightly. " It's Kagome Higurashi to you Mr... Heh, I don't know your name either." As she tried to recall if he had ever told it to her. " Inuyasha Takahashi." He smirked at the thoughtful expression on Kagome's face. but then in the first chapter you had " Kagome Higurashi, I'm sorry. My CD started skipping and I didn't see the light turn red. I can't believe it. I'm so sorry!" The man chuckled and shook her hand. Inuyasha discreetly inhaled, her scent was intoxicating. He took a mental note to ask her to dinner and maybe get a little closer to the beautiful creature before him. Her cheeks were tinged pink from the cold, her raven hair hung behind her in a high ponytail, stormy azure eyes and from what he could tell with her form fitting gray blazer and gray knee length skit, she had a hot body. " I'm Inuyasha Takahashi.. Mrs. Higurashi?" Kagome's face became pink with embarrassment as she took her hand back regretfully. She was beginning to settle down, even though her heart was beating a million miles a minute in her chest. Her eyes traveled over the youkai, he had the most piercing amber eyes she'd ever seen in her life and strangely enough his silver hair looked so soft, she was a little jealous. She smiled to herself when she saw his Tokyo University sweatshirt she'd gone there too
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Title: nice start
Reviewed By: kaye_kay28 [MediaMiner Member] On: June 05, 2006 16:08 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 8 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 9 of 10 Comment/Review:
lol. oh wow. . i haven't read a fanfic where inuyasha was a doctor too!! lollers. well ne ways this has been quite fun reading it. juss showing my support for this story n' for tha author. . i admire tha way you write. it's nice n' easy going. n' easy to read. i wish you'd come bak to write some more. but definately to finish just roomies . . . . okie dokie? love.you.erica.
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Reviewed By: xxbritnexx (not logged in) On: April 17, 2006 11:50 CDT
Rating(s):Style of Writing: 10 of 10
Spelling & Grammar: 10 of 10
Originality/Creativity: 10 of 10
Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I cant wait untill you update! This story is really good.
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Reviewed By: Anime Lady PIMP (not logged in) On: March 27, 2006 23:33 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
Goodnight. I love this story please update.
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Title: Update already!!
Reviewed By: Kaname_Inu_fan On: March 27, 2006 20:39 CST
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Come on! You have to update this thing! It's great! Please update this! I want to know how it goes! Please!!!???!!!???! =D
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Reviewed By: dudekiller(nsi) On: March 22, 2006 20:03 CST
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i like this story. please update soon.
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Reviewed By: GinaCat On: February 16, 2006 16:52 CST
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So cute I can't wait till you update
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Reviewed By: ficfan7 (logged out) On: February 14, 2006 01:12 CST
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Hey, just wanted to say you have a great fic here, but it also needs some work. i noticed that your story contradicts itself a few times, it's not something that will seriously affect your fic, but it definitly is something you should look at. anyways, please keep updating this fic!!!
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Reviewed By: jtcl [MediaMiner Member] On: February 07, 2006 21:40 CST
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I like your new I just find I think is good I hope you up date soon on it.
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Reviewed By: TrinityK [MediaMiner Member] On: February 07, 2006 01:55 CST
Rating(s):Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
I LOVE this story too!!! I can't wait for the next chapter. Seshomaru was funny in this chppie, well i thought so, lol. ;-) -TrinityK
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Reviewed By: kagome313 [MediaMiner Member] On: February 06, 2006 20:08 CST
Rating(s):Enjoyment Factor: 10 of 10
Overall Rating: 10 of 10 Comment/Review:
NICE story...Continue! I really like it...
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Reviewed By: djl [MediaMiner Member] On: February 06, 2006 19:28 CST
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alright good chapter... cute moments... I liked the little scheme you had going on with Sesshomaru and Kagome
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Title: Funny...
Reviewed By: Goddess Aphrodite On: February 06, 2006 10:00 CST
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Funny...Your story reminded me how my mother and father met. My mum was just learning how to drive and accidentaly swerved onto the sidewalk nearly knocking my father out. Fortunately he jumped out of the way in time. Next time they met was at a conference. Turns out that they were both working in the same company but had never crossed paths...until then. Overall I enjoyed reading your story. Keep it up!
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